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    dots Submission Name: Rascally squirrel...dots
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    Author: ladyngold
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 585/520/99
    Words: 8
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
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    dotsRascally squirrel...dots
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    Rascally squirrel
    aerobically navigate
    through leafy branches




    Submitted on 2005-07-16 01:20:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really good stuff! I love squirrels! They are comical little creatures and quite aerobic indeed! I feed them peanuts in my yard...they love it! You have created a wonderful image in my head as I do watch them frequently and your haiku describes them brilliantly! Great write! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I love watching squirrels - and aerobically is surely one of the ways they navigate the limbs of trees and lines of fences!
    I'm so glad to see you back! Love,Peace,Joy! epiph ; }
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, look at this. And you thought people didn't dig haikus? Doesn't look that way to me!

    It shows me, Cheryl Haiku Queen, that there are haikus and there are HAIKUs.

    Haikus aren't hard to write at all. Describe a part of nature and follow syllable rules. too easy...and THAT's the problem, it's too easy.

    Now, HAIKUs are three small lines that fill the readers head with pictures of nature in all its wonderment, unfolding layer upon layer of imagination and imagery. People can tell the difference.

    This, my dear, is a HAIKU!

    be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, what an aerobic workout eh?
    i think it should be "navigates" 'cause it's only one squirrel.
    i saw two squirrels the other day chasing each other all over the lawn and then up the tree... they're free entertainment!
    cute haiku.
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      What a delight to see you back on ES.

    And this haiku is a delight as well. Such wonderful animations of nature shown here in these words.

    Squirrels are indeed a site to watch. We have several in the backyard that draw my attention at times with their silly antics.

    Another lovely addition to your writings.

    Take care!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hello, hello...Queen of the Haiku.
    I think squirrels are funny little creatures. Had a couple in a back yard of mine once who pounced around like cats, HA! Funny little rascals. Once again, great imagery from three lil lines...
    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    Nice to read from you again, hope all is well.
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I love squirrels! Kudos for your ode to squirrels. I like you... this was fun. But I have difficulties leaving a longer comment than the actual work that I'm commenting on. So... Yay! Go squirrels!
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      The simplest line is always the most complex. This duality found in Haikus is most likely why there's a strong connection with Japanese Buddhism and the art of Haiku. You did a wonderful job of fulfilling the vast potential of Haiku poetry.
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by mr. | [ Reply to This ]
      brilliant. some haikus are as interesting as mork and mindy and this surpasses even them.

    please write more and let me know when u do!

    bugsy.
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by bugsy | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all welcome back

    Squirrels are funny
    they bounce around not a care in the world.
    There are times when I am bored
    I sit back and watch these little guys run around and do that tight rope walking thing they do on the power lines...amazing.
    Jumping around chaseing each other up and down trees fun [censored].
    Nice job
    and once again welcome back.
    Great now I got the welcome back kotter song in my head.

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]


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