Description: I always wanted a kiss in the rain, a dance in the rain. This is inspired by my muse, of course, and I would give anything just to dance with him under the stars one last time. Be kind, there is so much pain in this.
The moonlight makes shadows on your face
And I can't see what is in your eyes
Are these pretty words you say the truth
Or are they pretty lies?
You take my hand in yours
The stars twinkle in the sky
I know I should just walk away
Walk away before all of me can die
You pull me close to steal a kiss
Wrap your arms around my waist
I know that I should resist
But I'm caught up in your embrace
Our bodies sway to the rhythym
Of a song that meant so much
And I can't smell anything but your skin
All I can feel is your touch
So we dance, and I'm caught in this moment in time
This perfect moment that is only ours
This moment that we danced in the moonlight
After we made love under the stars
A light rain falls and glistens on our skin
The noise just a gentle hiss
Your lips graze mine, and my eyes close
And in the rain, we kiss.
My heart is breaking ever so slowly
Because at this moment, I know
This is the last time I'll be kissing you
I have to let you go
Our lips part and you inhale
Breathing what is left of me in
You bid me farewell and I cry
My tears glisten on your skin.
I made you cry, now you made me cry...it is even now... This was beautiful reminded me of...well something just as beautiful. Isn't it every womans "little girl" fantasy? Just to dance in the rain for no reason at all, held by someone...anyone. I don't have a partner anymore... I dance alone... ok Im not crying and Im not rambling... But I really really liked this... Thank You! ~Bonnie
Wow. Amazing. I hardly even know what to say. That's so sad. I can relate completely. And they were all just "pretty lies." I would say that it gets easier if you just give it time, but I dont exactly know how much I believe that anymore. It's like I once wrote somewhere:
"I hear it gets easier, I even thought it did. I thought that I was moving on, but who am I tryna kid? Cause I'm still haunted by the times That I'm not letting go of him."
You did a great job expressing yourself. I just feel bad that you have such painful things to express. Every word held so much emotion and they all fit together perfectly. I have many favorite parts. One of them is:
"My heart is breaking ever so slowly Because at this moment, I know This is the last time I'll be kissing you I have to let you go"
...I know the feeling. Hang in there. I hope that things all work out for you in time. Good luck with everything. Great job
oh my deary. It's so good and so full. You are a beautiful writer and I'm sorry that something so amazing would end like that. The wounds of the past don't heal with time but get covered up by the life we build in front of them. Always remember what happened and you'll never forget where you want to be. There's no writing advice I can give you. Smile wild dear all isn't lost when pain is involved.
This is a wonderful piece. Yes, your pain is evident. Even though you are letting go, that one last kiss will remain in your heart and on your lips. All the words you used are gentle, sensual and passionate. I'm sorry that things didn't work out for you. In time, you will heal. You take care of yourself. You truly poured your heart into this poem. It was great! wanda