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    dots Submission Name: Sexy Dance, Part IIdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       WARNING-VERY GRAPHIC!
    He read the first and said it was wrong... because of the way it ended... so I decided to supply the rest so his imagination wouldn't have to do all the work. And I got so many replies on the first that I figured why not.


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    dotsSexy Dance, Part IIdots
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    I know you want to touch me
    I can see it in your eyes
    I get on my knees in front of you
    Run my hands straight up your thighs
    The music keeps playing, and my body can't resist
    Doing its bump and grind
    And from the look on your face as you watch me move
    I can tell that you don't mind
    I shake my ass for you
    I do my sexy dance
    To hell with what your girlfriend can do
    This isn't about romance
    I pull you up out of your chair
    Melt by body into yours
    I can feel you growing harder as you think
    That I'm just your dirty little whore
    I push you back onto the bed
    I can tell you're having fun
    Unbutton your pants and climb on top of you
    Here's a pole I can do another dance on
    I shake my ass on you
    I do my sexy dance
    And the way you feel inside of me
    Almost puts me in a trance
    So, I wiggle back and forth
    Try to make it last
    And thinking you can touch again,
    You lightly smack my ass
    I grab your roaming hands, and I
    Pin them above your head
    Push you inside me as deep as you'll go
    Just remember what I said
    I'll shake my ass for you
    We do our sexy dance
    And when you come it's sudden and rough
    And I'm dying for another chance.




    Submitted on 2005-07-16 09:36:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dying for another chance, so we can do our sexy dance...This was quite ummm interesting from the erotic side... "and from that look on your face as you watch me move"...yup thats us...we males are visual creatures for sure...touching..pinning hands...all in all a good write.
    Alan
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]
      a good piece or erotica...I did find the repetition of "I'll shake my ass for you" more then distracting...it gave me a sense of immaturity in this grown folk session...however that is just me and I'm reading part II before I've read the orginal perhaps there is an ass shaking theme?
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      Racy, racy, racy and oooooooh so good! Girl, gota admit this has got me feeling all flushed and has my head filled up with imagers of what i'l do next time im all alone with a guy! Lucky guy u must have . . .Dig the way you come across as a whore especially loved the following line:
    "To hell with what your girlfriend can do
    This isn't about romance"- so evil doing another girls man but yet so heartpumping racy!
    Keep spreading the love (and your legs in this case)
    Nadia*
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
      You know what...I didn't read it...and I know that I won't be comfy readin it...so I am gonna tell u good job cause these people like it and these is fightin words...(i ain't smokin crack)
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      that is really wonderful piece. shows your talent in describing the most tinny detailsof this subject... my favourite subject which I have not tried to write about... lol ... you did a great job my dear fellow writer. go on.
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by Khaled AbdAllah | [ Reply to This ]
      haha yes we can see ur wild side especially in here. yea it was still a little too much in detail and made it graphic but it was still really good. better than any depressing write. so is this something u have done or are u just writing about it? lol

    brenna
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG I LOVE IT. haha. im a kinky girl so this is just what i felt like reading. haha loveee.
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]
      You really do have a knack for describing this stuff..lol...but this was really good. The rhyme, the rhythm...is perfect...great write. You said you wrote this so his imagination wouldn't have to do all the work...I think you reached ur goal. lol...awesome job! ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]


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