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    dots Submission Name: Spinning On Emptydots

    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 833
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 503

       Written in 1996.

    if you don't know what this is about i'm not telling you.

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    dotsSpinning On Emptydots

    In my veins, to the brain,
    Spun to hell and back again.
    Revealing this feeling is somehow repeating,
    Same fears turn into tears over and over through out my years.
    Same old nightmares and hopeless stares,
    And I still think that no one cares.
    Line after line,
    Rhyme after rhyme,
    I still canít escape these thoughts in my mind.
    Time after time,
    I always seem to find.
    Itís my own weakness that supports this tie that binds.

    Submitted on 2005-07-16 23:41:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i swear this and I know I have said this before .....the rhymes are a direct relation to mine ---I swear almost exactkly it is so weird...plusI know you wrote this a while back. And if ya didn't then we need to talk.....not about the similarities but YOU. Anyha I am still waiting for my spankings mistress cc
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      A nice piece. I thinl perhaps I don't need to know what it is about. As areader I can fill in my own ideas and things in my own soul.

    Revealing this feeling is somehow repeating,

    I love the way this reads.

    Very well constructed to produce a feeling from the flow.
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really emotional and I love it
    If anyone tells you to change it, tell them to go play a game of "hide-and-go-screw-yourself"
    this is what a good poem is all about..emotion..amazing
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]

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