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    dots Submission Name: Requiem for my Regretdots
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    Author: Maki
    ASL Info:    17/ female/ home
    Elite Ratio:    5.04 - 208/210/69
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 772
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 758



    Description:
       Yet agian, inspired by another role play, The guy she saved has turnd on her because she messed up and now he hates her, poor girl... and tell me if the title fits, this is what my friend and i came up with...


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    dotsRequiem for my Regretdots
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    I said, I think he hates me,
    And that I did it all,
    I really tried to help him,
    But only made him fall.

    I freed him from the chains,
    Gave him so much love and care,
    I now wish I hadnt,
    His pain is more than I can bear.

    His heart sheds his tears,
    His broken soul now screams,
    At times I feel like suicide,
    I have broken all his dreams!

    I took him out in a single blow
    Straight to the heart and mind,
    His happy face had fooled me,
    It made my heart grow blind.

    He said, I think I hate you,
    And, I think its your entire fault,
    So now I wish I hadnt saved him,
    Because of the end result.




    Submitted on 2005-07-16 23:51:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, I see where you were going with this rhyming piece. I think your last stanza didn't have the same metric pattern to it though. Do you know what I mean?

    I'm not sure about your title, but it does have an attraction factor that made me want to see what this poem was about, so it's up to you. But it is catchy, so yea...

    Cheers,
    Jase
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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