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    dots Submission Name: the calldots
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    Author: kristian
    ASL Info:    30/male/modesto, ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 71/44/29
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 936
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       THIS IS ABOUT SLAMMING METH (THE CALL) IS THE EFFECT AND THE FEELING YOU HAVE RIGHT AFTER YOU INJECT


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    dotsthe calldots
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    'call'
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    in a hallow addiction, feeling it screaming
    lost in the darkness, searching for reasons
    stepping through the shadows, hearing it
    breathing
    trying to fight back, but it started its feeding

    come feel this sickness, come feel this pain
    come feel my demons scream out your name
    behind the needle i hide the blame
    feeling its call, im going insane

    racing and pumping through my skin
    feeling my demons give birth from within
    swimming through the ashes of this hell i began
    coming off a sick one, my life is sin
    grabbing on tighter, can't find my friend
    I can not see. Is this the end???

    i can not tell if this is real
    its tearing me up inside
    I can not tell if this is real
    there is no place to hide
    Is this me or what you see?
    its tearing me up inside
    Grabbing on tighter, my knuckles get whiter
    there is no place to hide

    Your F%$king up my program (come feel my cries)
    Your F*%king up my program (cause uer lies)
    and its tearing me up inside

    KRIS GASKINS
    KRISTIAN 4:20







    Submitted on 2005-07-17 02:12:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very good song write
    I liked this a lot
    You have a good sense of taking words, and not neccesarily rhyme them, but use similar sounding words
    It takes talent.
    Im a song writer myself, and if you wanted, I would write some music to it
    Its still yours and Its your song, I would just see what I could do
    Well, anyways
    Good Write
    Bill-
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]


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