Description: hmmm somber sad mood i just kinda let the images flow and i dont know lol i came up with this
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when life comes to its bitter end
when hope dies and brave men bend
when angels offer not their feeble prayers
when shadows fall yet no one cares
when all thats good staggers dies
when the truth is but a mask of lies
when time stands still and heroes fall
when champions answer not the call
when the ocean stops its ebb and flow
when the stars above cease to glow
when lifes meaning seems to fade
when no dying tree can offer shade
till that day you have my heart
till that day tears us apart
till that day of woe and fears
till that day i live in tears
and when all my tears are shed
that day shall come to name me dead
and i shall whisper with a final breath
i love you still for love is death.
The repetition of the first word is great. The way you described things really made me focus more.
I loved it. I would put it as my favorite actaully.
I love the ending...the way if flows..everything about it.
Good write. It's very powerful.
The ending is really good and true "love is death" it is the most deticated thing you can do for love is to die. And death is constant and so is love this is a good one. I didn't think I would like it at first because of all the rhyming but I actually like this one.
Oh i got so many chills at the ending ....Im not a huge fan of the 20 question start there....but the ending was worth it ...This is very pretty ....sad and dark ...all those things i love ...so good job
Submission Name: When
