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    dots Submission Name: Heart Full Of Lightdots
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    Author: Mia
    ASL Info:    17/F/MD
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 103/123/52
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsHeart Full Of Lightdots
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    Look at that girl
    See how she's happy?
    See her laughing?
    Your first impression
    Needs to be questioned
    You think she's always bright
    Full of spirit, optamism, light
    That isn't all that lurks in her mind
    There is sorrow, lonlieness, and more, all combined
    She loves life, yet at the same time loathes it
    From all that she's been through, the loves, the triumphs, the hits
    Her friend's have betrayed her, her family dismays her
    But she lives on, looks forward to life
    Lives through all the pain and strife
    She won't give up, she's too determined to go on
    She'll live through all of it as her world is rained upon
    And make the most of when the sun shines bright
    For her heart is full of joy, love, and all the good things within her sight




    Submitted on 2005-07-17 10:14:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow htis is so good. HTere is a great flow and the rhyming scheme fits so perfectly. I carry myself in school that way like theres nothing wrong with me, but there really is sumtimes like when my parents were divorcing or in one month 6 family members that i was close with died. But you have to look at the bright side and deal with what you have every day. Great write. I'll have to look up more of your poems now cuz this really got my attention.
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by Starry Eyes | [ Reply to This ]


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