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    dots Submission Name: Forever and a Daydots
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    Author: Sarah Leger
    ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 436/387/80
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 964
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       i dunno what's with me tonight, wish you were around love but you went so, whatever I guess. I'm fine, no worries.


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    Your soul;
    Tucked away beneath my heart
    Right next to the dream.
    A wish upon a star,
    It seems so far
    But I tell myself,
    They're both right up close.
    I tell myself,
    It's almost here.
    I tell myself,
    That there's no reason to fear.
    I'm yours,
    Hopefully you're mine.
    Maybe if I'm lucky,
    It'll last until the end of time.
    Maybe if I'm lucky
    It'll last forever and a day.




    Submitted on 2005-07-17 19:14:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I swear i had commented on this one. but i guess not. oh well this is a great poem my fav part:

    Maybe if im lucky, ill last forever and a day.


    U shall last lovely. And if you dont. Then I will smuggle in w/e u need to last.
    [<3]

    Love from within
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      Every word of this is so pretty. The way you put them together is beautiful. I can't even explain how much I like this. The flow and emotion was perfect. You did a great job expressing yourself. Sometimes love can be the hardest part of living, but also the best. The whole thing is great, but I really love the lines:

    "I'm yours,
    Hopefully you're mine."

    That definitely stuck out the most. I know too well what its like. Good luck with everything. Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Sarah,
    I was glad to see some of your work tonight. it's nice to see people that I'm actually familiar with again. I see your life is progressing along those painful adolescent years when love is extremes of happy and depressed. it does get better, and I've decided that forever and a day takes a lor of work from both sides-even soulmates screw up sometimes.
    Hang in there and keep writing.
    jan
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      so much blah blah blah bleh? hehe i hearts it and i will try my damndest to make it last that long. i am glad i get to read another b e a utiful peice of work from you it fills my days up with the smae goo that fill your what is it called veins i think that it is called love? hehe i love you and you kow that

    tanky
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
      hello ,
    very beautiful piece , great flow and feeling , wanting love to last forever , is the one thing we all want when we love someone , wanting it to last forever and a day , wanting more than forever just lovely , great ending.
    take care
    Lainie x
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]


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