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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 500
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
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    I'm starting this story and I have no clue how it's gonna end...it's my life and I'm not done yet...so if you are dissapointed I'm truly sorry. I was probably dissapointed as well.

    The story I have to tell was coming on for about two years before now...and it has a lot to do with my parents.

    " I blame you for this!"

    My mom use to work at this resturaunt called Hardees, which shuold be a book all on its own...honestly I spent some of my best days there. But yeah, maybe someday I will be in the mood to write that one but for now my point is where I am now and how I got here. But I met some very interesting peoples at Hardees: Tony, my sisters current ex boy, the Paris brothers, well they need their own book as well, and Bryan, who is just sweet and nice and I think everyone should know him. Then there are the random people that didn't really work there or anything but they were just associated with Hardees in general. My pretty guy, long haired grunge black mustang driver, Steven, the guy that worked in Subway that I got free cookies from, and whatever boy I was courting at the time.( I was a bit fickle in that period) But I shouldn't write this now...onward we go.

    It starts out with my mom quitting her job at this place because my dad threatened to leave her. She worked nightshift for over a year and I guess he was lonely cause she was never home. But even after she quit and broke my heart from having to leave all those people behind he sorta left anyways.

    My dad has an extreme case of paranoia and the cops were always out to get him. But he left using this icscuse and ended up in a camper on this twenty-something year olds property. This particular chic was named Jenny and she was from the begginning a sworn enemy of my mommy's. She was jealous you see cause my dad loves children and from some fluke in this world this evil chic popped out three incredible children that my daddy loved. But mommy thought that evil Jenny was trying to seduce my daddy and have him take care of her and her three children. There were a million conspiracy theories that go along with this but like I said they were all silly paranoid poops.

    But my mom, with her new job at ICB electronics, went to Tennessee like everyday because she was and I quote "Trying to save their relationship" Like it was that great to begin with. Don't get me wrong I had a great dad...but mommy didn't have a great husband. He cared about her and all he just treated her like shit with his verbal abuse that I had grown accustomed to since I knew that dirty words were bad.





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      This is neat... I think this is a great idea...I could probably supplement all this with stuff of my own about that time... but this is your thing, so I'll let that go. I was reading it, and it brings a lot back. Good job
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      well this is interesting cuz im reading a story about another persons life. its quite interesting so ill be reading yours too. well your dad moved out basically and is living on this chicks property. thats not really good. and ur mom quitting hardees must have been hard because u had some somewhat close people it sounds like there. i kind of know the feeling. but anywho i gotta go for now ill read ur other part one in a bit.

    brenna
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]


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