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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
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       And the saga of my "meaningless consumer-driven life" continues.


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    But she was going to Tennessee all the time and me and my sister got to spend way too much time with our boyfriends. I was like fourteen or fifteen...Raivn my sister was like twenty I guess cause that was around the time she lost her virginity...sorry...I know I didn't wanna know that, I should have spared you as well.

    See the thing about Raivn is all throughout highschool she never had time for a boy cause she was buisy with grades and basketball. She liked boys but she didn't really try that hard because my mom , who was trying t make her perfect wouldn't really allow it.I guess she took it to heart when mommy told her she couldn't date until she was married...funny eh?

    But that's her story and eventually she'll get around to writing that causetruthfully she's the writer not me. I'm the artist. Hell yeah bitch, so if you like dark boho versions of maybe some Salvidor Dali than I am your girl.What the hell was my point?...oh yeah me and Raivn(my name is Jazmine by the way) were getting too much sneaking around freedom because my mom was "saving" her relationship with daddy when she should have been watching us. Strike one yo.




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      Wow, throw me in there for real. I just read that comment by sandman up there. I don't think he likes me cause I write graphic sex stuff...oh well. This is good. I like reading about myself from someone elses point of view...but he made me sad. :(
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont no what to say family fued at least you seem to tell it like it is i replied to a comment last week to whom you mewntion i read her to poems in my opinion you are the artist or writer which ever you prefer i think you got a skill for writing as you seem to cover any of the categories
    thanx for all your kind words
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      wow jaz this was a really interesting read ...let you in on a little secret...i got married whrn i was nineteen and now i'm getting a divorce. i lost my virginity at fifteen though not that it makes your sister feel any better , don't jib her about it though maybe she just didn't feel ready i don't know
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    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]


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