Well as far as I'm concerned you hid the true meaning of this very clearly, honestly you could almost be depicting a roller coaster ride. But considering that your genre is Betrayal I figure it's about friends putting you down then giving you a tiny bit of a lift just to push you back down again... I'm most probably wrong but that's my guess. Good rhyme scheme and good flow. Laura-Grace
I've read a lot of angst poetry, on this sight and reminscing with friends about theirs and my own. A lot of times it's over embelished because there is so much emotion pushing the writers hand, but you pulled off one of the hardest aspects of writing, control. I liked this poem a lot because it didn't just pour everything out of the vessel or smash it on the ground, you filled each cup with the ease of a veteran waitress.
Submission Name: Falling, Fall Away
