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    dots Submission Name: Caples Lake Ladydots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 19
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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       I rescued a ladybug from drowning....she was magical!

    Love,Peace,Joy!!!


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    dotsCaples Lake Ladydots
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    The Lady of the Lake
    Dressed as a Bright-Red Ladybug;
    Drying her wings
    upon the palm
    of Man




    Submitted on 2005-07-18 14:44:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one and how a certain moment in time we can recall and share with a write like this.
    I like how you've used the action of her drying off on man's palm, very sweet. Sharing our insight, that's what this art is all about. Thanks Tiff,
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely nothing wrong with this. Every word is perfect. Not one thing I'd change. I especially love the title!

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    Peace,

    Joey
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes Tiffany that ladybug was the majic that inspired you to write this whimsical beautiful prose. But I don't see the ladybug drying it's delicate wings on a man's hand but I visual a womens for some reason...maybe it is because I see this experience in my mind and that women is you as you put in your description.
    `always write poetry, cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice! It does indeed sound like the start of a good fairytale. Maybe you could expand on it.. but really, just these lines you have here are delicate and enjoyable to read. I can see, by your neat descriptions.. the little ladybug drying her wings on your palm, as if she were without a care in the world. It takes a gentle soul to find such beauty in the little things in life. Thanks for sharing.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey thanx for the comment on fire in my soul you should read part 1 the whole story will be approxamately 300 poems i dont no how many pages the book will hit the publisher spring 2006 when i am legally free
    i liked your post and i also had a week away it is warm here in ontario canada to 45 degrees celcius very hot as i work outside
    enjoy reading your posts your a good writer
    much appreciated to your comments
    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so cute. You took something as simple as a ladybug in your hand and made it sound like the begining of a fairytale. You made the moment sweet for the readers. This was good.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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