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    dots Submission Name: Caples Lake Ladydots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 19
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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       I rescued a ladybug from drowning....she was magical!


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    dotsCaples Lake Ladydots

    The Lady of the Lake
    Dressed as a Bright-Red Ladybug;
    Drying her wings
    upon the palm
    of Man

    Submitted on 2005-07-18 14:44:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one and how a certain moment in time we can recall and share with a write like this.
    I like how you've used the action of her drying off on man's palm, very sweet. Sharing our insight, that's what this art is all about. Thanks Tiff,
    peace and love,
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely nothing wrong with this. Every word is perfect. Not one thing I'd change. I especially love the title!



    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes Tiffany that ladybug was the majic that inspired you to write this whimsical beautiful prose. But I don't see the ladybug drying it's delicate wings on a man's hand but I visual a womens for some reason...maybe it is because I see this experience in my mind and that women is you as you put in your description.
    `always write poetry, cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice! It does indeed sound like the start of a good fairytale. Maybe you could expand on it.. but really, just these lines you have here are delicate and enjoyable to read. I can see, by your neat descriptions.. the little ladybug drying her wings on your palm, as if she were without a care in the world. It takes a gentle soul to find such beauty in the little things in life. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey thanx for the comment on fire in my soul you should read part 1 the whole story will be approxamately 300 poems i dont no how many pages the book will hit the publisher spring 2006 when i am legally free
    i liked your post and i also had a week away it is warm here in ontario canada to 45 degrees celcius very hot as i work outside
    enjoy reading your posts your a good writer
    much appreciated to your comments
    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so cute. You took something as simple as a ladybug in your hand and made it sound like the begining of a fairytale. You made the moment sweet for the readers. This was good.
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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