Description: jsut some thoughts i threw out there, work on it when i have time................................
Lost Friend (revised) -------------------------------------------
What did I do to hear those words?
Is there any reasoning in this?
I had hoped for a peaceful end
But you instead disappeared, a lost friend
Memories left to fade into dust
Pictures lying in the sun to fade away
Words that cut to deep to express
You left bleeding lines across my chest
Can I forgive you for hurtful things?
Is this what the future brings?
I see glimpses of what may come
As I sit alone dripping cerulean pain
Cannot forget the things we did
Or everything we went through together
Now you have become my lost friend
For reasons I just cannot comprehend
Jagged lines are killing me slowly
And yet you just keep speaking
Yet explanations are left within the dust
Forever silent now are your lips
I shall leak out pain until I know
So please, lost friend, donít move slow
Dry up my river Iíve left for you
Let us start over and ~love~ again
a very beautiful poem that i relate to perfectly i have had one best friend my whole life recently he moved away and im having a lot of trouble finding him again we kept in touch when i moved 3000 miles away i really like how you ended your poem with a positive note you are not the one giving up give your friend time some of us need time alone from different situations I hope evreything works out i strongly believe it will
i like this poem, how it draws you into it by telling a story. "Words that cut to deep to express You left bleeding lines across my chest"- those are my favorite lines. My suggestion is to use more emotions in your language- "Cannot forget the things we did, Everything we went through together" good job! -kate