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    dots Submission Name: Haunteddots
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    Author: Aphrodite Dream
    ASL Info:    35 Female South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 52/33/11
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsHaunteddots
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    Dressed only in the seam of dust,
    Eyes lurking too scared to trust
    Unveiling the beauty of dawn between....

    Slow and graciously life's secrets whispered,
    fallen on curved ears bitterly twisted
    Hungered future awaits its presence......

    Hastily wrapped in the shell of darkness,
    Kept folded away in tear drop shelters.
    Shyness projected in spiced spears......

    To elude or discover.....
    Only you can reveal.




    Submitted on 2005-07-18 17:09:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      These words provoke images of elfs... or supernatural creatures hiding away in little dusty corners - too scared to show their faces for the fear of being discovered. Haunting and poignant words that paints a dimension of the supernatural. Probably not what you intended... but this is what it brings to me. Very beautifully crafted.
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by sugar-n-spice | [ Reply to This ]
      Hello Cobie ,

    I'm not sure on the title but other than that it a very thought profolking piece of writing , with fantastic wording and flow , i love the sentences:
    Eyes lurking too scared to trust.

    fallen on curved ears bitterly twisted.

    these to lines are outstanding , great job.

    take care Lainie x
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]


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