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Beautiful? (3)

Author: Oli
ASL Info:    23/F
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This is another poem in the beautiful series. You don't have to read the other poems to understand it, it speaks for itself. I'm not sure how many poems there will be. I guess I'll know when I'm done. Please tell me what you think.

Beautiful? (3)

I wonder what you see
When you look at me
You say I'm beautiful
but I just can't believe

You hold my face
in your hands
and look at me
like you are lucky

I see the love
in your eyes
and I can almost see the beauty
you say you see in me

But then my mind takes over
and my eyes are clouded
and once again the beauty
you say I have... is gone

In my mind
I don't know what I am
All I know is that I love you
and I'm beautiful in your eyes

Maybe some day I will see
but it will take some time
Be patient my love
and one day I'll believe

7/18/05 Caitlin

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  This was great! I can't tell you what my favorite lines are cause I liked them all! It reminds me of someone that has just fallen in love. You truly have talent for writing...keep up the good work!
| Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
  Very well written poem indeed, was a time I seen things as this poem reads in a girl, I always beheld her as a lovely work of beautiful art, cliché' as that sounds it is the truth.
Thanks for such a nice write.
| Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]
  Maybe one day I'll believe. Perfect way to finish it. This one is rather like the last, I enjoyed it just as much. You really give a good description of how lots of girls feel about themselves... I know I've been in that^ girls shoes many times before. Lovely way to write it, it has a good flow and although I don't usually like poems without rhyme I can appreciate this and enjoyed it.
| Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi Cat, this is lovely and well written. I think what's important and positive is your belief that he does indeed find you beautiful. As long as you believe him as you state you may be able to take that in. Messages we get growing up become our own. Or sometimesw it is dangerous on some level to too good.

Anyway sorry for the shrink stuff it just sneaks out sometimes :)

Nice write!

| Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
  awwwww i love it! beauty is all in the eye of the beholder and i also recognized the behavior in myself. that is a very good write. and my favorite part is:
Be patient my love
and one day I'll believe

i think it ties up the poem beautifully.
great work
| Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh, I see when you say it's part of the beautiful series. Your poems are beautiful. Beauty are in the eyes of the beholder. so true! As long as you see love in the other person's eyes, this let you know what he/she feel for you is real. In my mind I don't know what I am. All I know that I love you And I'm beautiful in your me that's all that matter. That person will be patient because the love is there and love conquers all! Great poems! wanda
| Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]

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