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    dots Submission Name: Beautiful? (3)dots
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    Author: Oli
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 206/211/53
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       This is another poem in the beautiful series. You don't have to read the other poems to understand it, it speaks for itself. I'm not sure how many poems there will be. I guess I'll know when I'm done. Please tell me what you think.


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    dotsBeautiful? (3)dots
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    I wonder what you see
    When you look at me
    You say I'm beautiful
    but I just can't believe

    You hold my face
    in your hands
    and look at me
    like you are lucky

    I see the love
    in your eyes
    and I can almost see the beauty
    you say you see in me

    But then my mind takes over
    and my eyes are clouded
    and once again the beauty
    you say I have... is gone

    In my mind
    I don't know what I am
    All I know is that I love you
    and I'm beautiful in your eyes

    Maybe some day I will see
    but it will take some time
    Be patient my love
    and one day I'll believe


    7/18/05 Caitlin




    Submitted on 2005-07-18 17:35:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was great! I can't tell you what my favorite lines are cause I liked them all! It reminds me of someone that has just fallen in love. You truly have talent for writing...keep up the good work!
    DJ
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written poem indeed, was a time I seen things as this poem reads in a girl, I always beheld her as a lovely work of beautiful art, cliché' as that sounds it is the truth.
    Thanks for such a nice write.
    Alan
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe one day I'll believe. Perfect way to finish it. This one is rather like the last, I enjoyed it just as much. You really give a good description of how lots of girls feel about themselves... I know I've been in that^ girls shoes many times before. Lovely way to write it, it has a good flow and although I don't usually like poems without rhyme I can appreciate this and enjoyed it.
    Laura-Grace
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Cat, this is lovely and well written. I think what's important and positive is your belief that he does indeed find you beautiful. As long as you believe him as you state you may be able to take that in. Messages we get growing up become our own. Or sometimesw it is dangerous on some level to too good.

    Anyway sorry for the shrink stuff it just sneaks out sometimes :)

    Nice write!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      awwwww i love it! beauty is all in the eye of the beholder and i also recognized the behavior in myself. that is a very good write. and my favorite part is:
    Be patient my love
    and one day I'll believe

    i think it ties up the poem beautifully.
    great work
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, I see when you say it's part of the beautiful series. Your poems are beautiful. Beauty are in the eyes of the beholder. so true! As long as you see love in the other person's eyes, this let you know what he/she feel for you is real. In my mind I don't know what I am. All I know that I love you And I'm beautiful in your eyes...to me that's all that matter. That person will be patient because the love is there and love conquers all! Great poems! wanda
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]


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