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    dots Submission Name: A human race I hatedots
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    Author: bluesoxz
    ASL Info:    16fohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 71/101/38
    Words: 451
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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    dotsA human race I hatedots
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    See me bleed
    From my eyes
    Hear the devils
    Cries see heaven
    As it sighs.

    The earth quakes
    Look at the souls
    As they Turn dark
    And Grey.I don't
    know who you are
    but im The Fetish
    you Been tasteing
    Everyday.

    Lick the sour taste
    From you lips and
    Tell me its the dirt
    You licked from your
    Murderers grave.
    Your guilty conscience
    Bleeds the stitches
    Wont hold and your
    Mouth wont stay shut.

    time ticks away and
    The human race starts
    To disintegrate
    Slowly red droplets hit the
    Floor then I see my
    reflection looking back
    at me then I wipe
    Away the pain that remains.

    I locked my heart in
    Pandoras box and
    Sealed it tight for evil
    Lurks inside Of every
    Vein.I took This empty
    Road and I have no more
    Gas to Carrie on
    My energy drifted off
    In no mans land and there
    Is no way in retrieving it.

    They put the pieces of
    Life back under the bed
    because they want no
    one to figure this puzzle
    out.They took life and
    put the word hell in it
    and now it starts to come
    To me more clear.

    Every breath I take is gone
    With the wind my family
    never knew I existed.
    They took my flesh and
    Haverest it and now what's
    Left is only bone and dust.
    I took a blade and carved in
    my arm im a dead inside so
    people Would know Im dead
    without me speaking it.

    Sinners lips shrivel up like
    Leaves.Old and diseased.
    Busted and bloody but
    We still kiss them like
    Their from the heavens.
    God took his mighty Sword
    And said behold I cast you
    off my earth and stab me
    In my heart.

    Like a thief I still your life
    And make it mine.
    I use your body and your
    Blood to survive.I feed off
    The bullshit you take in
    Everyday and I become
    Addicted to your ways.

    Just an other soul on
    The earth
    Just an other face in
    The crowd.
    Just a human race
    I hate.
    My life is fucked up
    And blank Watch
    As I make myself
    Decay.






    Submitted on 2005-07-18 19:06:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      THIS WAS VERY INTERESTING AND UNIQUE IN A GOOD WAY, I LIKED THE CREATIVITY YOU ERESSED UPON THIS PIECE, YOU GAVE GREAT VIVID DETAILS, THIS WAS VERY INTENSE AND GRIPPING WITH GREAT EFFORT FOR THE CONCEPT. GOOD JOB !
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by J-IDENTITY | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this was really a great piece and it kept my attention the whole way through. As I was reading it I began to think that it would make a really good song, rock of course but good none the less. Well great job and I hope to be reading more from you soon.

    Karen
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by kp_2007 | [ Reply to This ]


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