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    dots Submission Name: 40-Lovedots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 710
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 186



    Description:
       Obviously this is about a couple who've fallen out of love, but have become too comfortable with their misery to ever part.


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    dots40-Lovedots
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    Middle aged
    couple playing
    tennis when
    they go
    home the net
    is still between them




    Submitted on 2005-07-18 20:18:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think that this is short and to the point, its one of those things that makes people who don't like to read poetry read it and actually get something out of it. It has a strong message with few words that is something that is not easy to accomplish. The only thing I would add is some punctuation. Nice one.
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by chemberdan | [ Reply to This ]


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