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Barefooted Dreaming


Author: Indigo Kid
ASL Info:    33/f/everywhere
Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 428 /438 /115
Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /Happy
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I've always wanted to be a movie star, so sometimes I pretend...LOL!


Barefooted Dreaming



Draped in pure khaki glamour and
stardust in my moonlite hair,
my barefooted heels step onto
natures green velvet carpet
rolled out for my entrance.

Musical notes of crickets floating in the air
and the scent of lilacs filling my nose,
I smile for the cameras held by the
fireflies as I thank the world for
my award of this evening.





Submitted on 2005-07-18 21:07:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow indigo that was really cool, I loved the imagery and I loved the way the poem flowed. it has allot of depth. keep it up as always I love you stuff.
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by hidden lady | [ Reply to This ]
  Now this was so beautifully written,you get a standing ovation from me. Your imagery, honesty and care-free love of dreaming was capture perfectly in this poem. I have to add this to my fav list.

bravo bravo bravo

Edward
| Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem has very good imagery and they way you mixed fireflies with cameras was nice. I don't think I will look at them the same way again. This makes you see that if you imagine something it can be true even if its just for a moment. I like it.
| Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by chemberdan | [ Reply to This ]
  It would be intresting to be a movie star
having the world watch your every move people pampering you to no end. THE MONEY
But would it not get old after a bit...longing for something normal.

I like this and the images it produced in my head.
Nice Job.

~shawn
| Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
  It's cool. It's not so much a movie star as a fairy star or something because you use nature to describe the surroundings so it sorta reminds me of a fairy or a dryad or something...
The description makes it pretty and sweet to the soul, it's nice to read. Peaceful and hopeful I guess.
I'm not sure if you meant moonlit or moonlight on the second line but you should fix that... that's all I can see wrong with it,
Oh and it's a really pretty title and it's perfect!
Laura-Grace
| Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
  That's absolutely beyond beauty. I laughed and shook my head from having expectations yanked out from under me. Not that I expected something average, but rare implies unexpected, and this is rare.
| Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by mr. | [ Reply to This ]
  Ha!...how cool...yes, even though you may not be a movie star...I think you could pull it off. You only get an emmy for this one though...hee-hee. O.K., maybe a Golden Globe too...goobada, goobada...

This was nice and I really liked the description. Have a good one and keep smilin'
| Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  what a sweet eloquent piece...certainly not what I was expecting...yet so much more! From your titile to the last flowing line this was just fabulous! It read like a soft breeze gentle caressing the readers muse. Well done!

I haven't read a post here in literally about a month...what a wonderful piece to welcome myself back with!

many blessing be
T
| Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  This is pretty. The imagery is great, and so is everything else about it. Excellent wording. And who says you can't be a movie star? You never know what could happen. Do what you want, you're only living once. Anywho, I like it a lot. Great job

-nikkki
| Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  This one is cool. Well, I like the details. I can somehow relate. I guess everybody has gone to that thinking..well at least..good job...
| Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Joyce RL | [ Reply to This ]


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