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    dots Submission Name: Bittersweetdots

    Author: dreamweaver
    ASL Info:    28/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    7.22 - 1022/443/42
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    All the words you've spoken
    have torn straight through my heart-
    torn it right in half.
    It's hard to imagine a heart so cold-
    could hold an ounce of love.
    Every word you speak
    holds hate in every breath
    When will it end?

    Bittersweet goodbyes
    Bittersweet hellos
    Bittersweet memories

    You never hear a word I say
    nor do you care.
    Can you see the pain in my eyes?
    If you could only feel the pain
    deep within my heart.
    Step away from yourself
    you'll see

    Bittersweet goodbyes
    Bittersweet hellos
    Bittersweet memories

    All this time
    All these tears-
    is it really worth all this?

    Bittersweet goodbyes
    Bittersweet hellos
    Bittersweet memories

    Bittersweet love.

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      A very sadness and regretful write, atleast that is what I gathered from my reading. I found it very interesting your use of repitition. I liked that.

    It always difficult when you find yourself in a very bad relationship. And sometimes you just simply cannot help to but just walk away because there is simply nothing yoou can do.
    But alas there will always been those terrible memories. This is what the poem evoked to me.
    It was an good write. Keep up the good work and have a blessed and wonderful day.
    | Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      i didnt know someone could be so in love with theirselves to not the love the person that makes them smile. i guess thats why they call love bittersweet. you put so much into it but get nothing in return. truly sad but good way of putting it nice write i liked it
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed reading this. This could be a very good song due to the repeating stanza, which is probably my favourite in the whole poem. Simplicity at its best. I also liked how the "verses" (if you will) linked to the repeating stanza and they went very deep into emotions which only helped draw the reader in some more. Nice expression!
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, your title described the poem: bittersweet.

    There is a lot of hurt in your words, but also a longing, a pleading for things to change, for the coldness to somehow thaw.

    An excellent read, nothing to criticize, I really liked it.

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty friggin straightforward and I read it as someone trying to explain their feelings in a calm and rational way in order to maybe get an answer rather than cry or scream, ya know? Thats just how the title struck me...and the expression was superb. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      heartbreaking read Candi it is very moving. I feel the deep torment in it, a great and horrible pain. my favorite line "Every word you speak holds hate in every breath" that expression of language is awesome. I wish the you the best blessings and brightest days, sincerely and respectfully, Mike :) ((added, I'm putting this up))
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this very much. It is so hard when you realize the person that you loved can be so cold and unfeeling...you captured it well. This is a beautiful poem...keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Good expression of feeling in this piece. I can feel the anger screaming out of the words written here, an angery hurt. I too feel the end would be better without the "The" before bittersweet love otherwise a good piece of writing. Take care!
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      The hurt is apparent in this piece...I would list it under prose though...It just had a bit of a "Ramble" type of flow to it...not so much measured poetry...

    I felt that the last line would be perfect with out "the"...just leave it a lingering...bittersweet love...
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      man...it's like a movie again!
    one of those drama where this guy is just so blind and cannot see the love that we give them!
    bittersweet...what a wonderful title...
    why sweet?
    why not sour?
    question...why do we keep loving this guy even though you already know they're never gonna love you and they've already stabed your heart more than once?

    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by Fearless | [ Reply to This ]
      ... have you read the book. 'Women who love too much' ? it seems that there is one heck of a lot of this painful bitter sweet love about on this planet. common sense and education does not appear to make one ounce of difference. where we may avoid poison and dangerous objects and protect ourselves from catching certain contagious diseases we just allow ourselves to be hurt time and time again. i guess its a more powerful addiction than heroin.
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]

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