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    dots Submission Name: Medicatedots
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    Author: Cindergarden1
    ASL Info:    18 Male Sweden
    Elite Ratio:    4.69 - 43/58/17
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 627
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1173



    Description:
       Autobiography.

    Intended imagery: I am visiting the shrink/doctor/me

    The doctor is speaking to the patient = I am talking to myself

    Long story short:

    I haven't been taking this breakup too well.
    True story.


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    dotsMedicatedots
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    Got a paper, got a pen
    Got some words to break your skin
    That's how you like it, now
    Since she left you've been a wreck
    You are losing self-respect
    While looking deeper still into the bottle

    You get undressed to get revenge
    Drink when there's no thirst to quench
    That's how you like it now
    There are monsters still about
    Sing a song to let 'em out
    And let your conscience speak when no one's looking

    Look in the mirror
    What do I say to you
    And what is your excuse?
    I'm in pieces
    How do you treat this, please?

    Take your friend into the park
    Sing and get drunk in the dark
    That's how you like it, now
    She still needs you, why'd you leave?
    Do you honestly believe her
    When she says that she is doing better?

    Look in the mirror
    What do I say to you
    And what is your excuse?
    I am in pieces
    How do you treat this, please,
    Medicate me, stop my self-abuse
    Medicate me, stop my self-abuse




    Submitted on 2005-07-19 16:19:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey Gramps. Its been awhile since I talked to you. Decided I'd drop a comment since you applaud me so well. First piece of your work that I've read that I can recall. I like the first verse. I also like the 8th line. Forgive me about the not so inspiring comment. Talk to you when I have a chance. Love, Ash.
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading this. Another one of your original writes. It was really amazing. I ahven't read anything like this before. I really liked the chorus, I thought that was pretty interesting.. I like all yoour lyrics, cause most of them have a really good flow and have a rhyming scheme, that is not forced. Or you can't tell if it is or not. So thats good.

    My favorite part was the first verse


    Got a paper, got a pen
    Got some words to break your skin
    That's how you like it, now
    Since she left you've been a wreck
    You are losing self-respect
    While looking deeper still into the bottle


    I like how you came up with the lines of that verse.. Very cathcy.. Love it love it.

    Another one of you fine lyrics.. I usually always enjoy them..

    Love them

    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]


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