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    dots Submission Name: That thing called love.dots

    Author: bluesoxz
    ASL Info:    16fohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 71/101/38
    Words: 346
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThat thing called love.dots

    With all the wisdom
    They still call me a
    Child. IM insane to
    Carrie what I hold

    Take a look at
    The uglynes that
    Sits inside and tell
    me you cant see
    this from the outside.
    Inching and scratching
    I dig my nails in these

    Nothing stops life from
    Growing but somehow
    They mange to stop me
    From breathing.On my
    knees I collapse.

    Cant let a bird go when
    It has a broken wing let
    me outta this fucking cage
    so I can let go all this rage.

    see my battle Scars I
    have no more blood to spill
    on this battlefield..so let
    my heart pump what's left.
    I take my last breath.

    Locked away like a prisoner
    I stay buried beneath these
    Bars My mind has been
    Driven to far. Slowly I begin
    To choke.

    Letting go what's inside
    Escaping what I hide
    Falling deeper to what I fear
    Hell Is now frozen I feel
    The knife go in my back.

    Im a poser to my
    idenity.The world
    Wraps around me
    like a vein about to
    Burst and my insides
    Are laid out on an
    Cutting bored getting
    Ready to be sliced up.

    Like a tree im hallow
    inside and my bark is
    Pealing off.The roots
    Are coming up and
    The leafs are starting
    To shrivel up.
    No water can bring
    This back to life.

    So gone and dead to
    The world I don't know
    why I take my breaths
    That keep my heart going
    I don't know why I give my
    Body the energy to move
    I guess you can say its
    That thing called love that
    Keeps me strong.

    Submitted on 2005-07-19 21:09:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its very emotionall.. u seem very pissed n hurt at the same time.. i like so many stanzas that i dont have a favorite<3ash
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]

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