Where are you now?
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I realize that I am a supremely armature writer and I have no idea even where to begin. The thing is a few friends of mine have been avid poets for a long time and they say it helps them to relax. It doesn't have to be about the finished product just the fact of simply putting everything down on paper. I wrote this a few hours after the death of someone close to me since then I have yet to read over it and make modifications. If you have any suggestions be sure to elaborate as I can clearly use all the help I can get.
Where are you now?
Where are you now? Now that life has come to a close. Where are you now? That you are no longer with us You are in heaven With the Lord as your guide A peaceful place in the skies I can almost see you when I close my eyes Do you know that I love you? For I often told you so Do you know that I miss you? Though it was your time to go I will see you again When my days here are through Until then I will miss you For I already do Have you found joy? In your heaven up above Have you found joy? Peace and love The joy you deserve And the happiness as well Peace well justified By the tired look in your eyes We all know it was time Yours to leave, and ours to say goodbye As we waited for your final day to come All began to cry Old times were remembered New ones ready to begin For now you may look down at us Through you loving eyes and see That we will always love you No matter how far you seem to be |
Submitted on 2005-07-19 23:45:43 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Sigh. A very innocent and honest poem. It's interesting to imagine loved ones in heaven? Do they remember us? Are they watching us? We hope so... It's so weird, death...Like they left us, but not really, but they still did...and how much we wonder in the expanse of the universe, heaven and hell, Where are you now? In the first stanza when you speak of peaceful skies, etc. it really gives a sense of peace....Which of course is beautiful. The rest of the stanzas are very well put for someone who just lost a loved one...but my favorite remains the first. Keep writing and I really hope to read more from you Very, VERY sooN!!!!!! Peace, Lucy | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ] | at least it rhymes. i dont give a damn about 'heart' and 'feeling'. i just wanna get my % back up. make more spaces in between. its hard to read for me. | | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by Sephiroth | [ Reply to This ] | |
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