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Silent Prayer


Author: K
ASL Info:    26/Namibia/Africa
Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 183 /172 /46
Words: 219
Class/Type: Lyrics /Longing
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A soppy song I write. Let's start a band. Hehehehe!!!!!! Any feedback is appreciated.
Have a BE-YOU-TEE-FUL day!


Silent Prayer



You left without a word
You never said goodbye
I never had the chance to say
I'm sorry

I wonder where you are
I need to see you one last time
To tell you how I feel
But where you are?
I do not know
So I say a silent prayer

(Chorus)
Keep her safe from harm
keep her in Your loving arms
and let her find the way
to all she's searching for
Never let her go
Never leave her cold
And may she find the strength to face her fears
And live another day

You left me only memories
Fading as the days goes by
The warmth of your sweet embrace
Your smile, I miss it so
But where are you?
Oh tell me please
Lord I'm down on bended knees

Chorus

(Bridge)
Baby I never meant to cause you pain
Oh, never meant to hurt you
Never meant to break your heart
Oh...
If you just give me one last chance
To tell you what you mean to me
My silent prayer for you (repeat)

Keep her safe from harm
Keep her in Your loving arms
Let her find her way
Let her find her way
Back to me

Chorus

(Outro)
A silent prayer for you




Submitted on 2005-07-20 01:09:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Love it. YOu have such a great gift. I think I read one of your other writes a couple days ago. But I think this is was better! Its really really beautiful. The name for this I like Silent Prayer. The whole meaning is for you to say a prayer and the prayer is to watch over this person, and make this person doesn't get hurt. But I really enjoyed it. It was differant and yet the same. You know what I mena. It was a beautiful write.

The thing I thought you did the best with is the chorus, ccompletely amazing. I love it I had a rhythem going for it

Keep her safe from harm
keep her in Your loving arms
and let her find the way
to all she's searching for
Never let her go
Never leave her cold
And may she find the strength to face her fears
And live another day

I think you did a really good job on that. I thought these lyrics had a great flow, for the parts that were rhymed you did a good job with that without making it seemed forced.

Good Job
Keep it up

Stephanie
| Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is another beautiful piece of work. With your talent for writing I wish you all the luck in getting your songs recorded. The feelings you show is evident by asking the Lord to watch over her and protect her etc. That's coming straight from the heart. A beautiful write, a beautiful love song! I would love this one too! take care, wanda
| Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]


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