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    dots Submission Name: Silent Prayerdots
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    Author: K
    ASL Info:    26/Namibia/Africa
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 183/172/46
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 754
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1369



    Description:
       A soppy song I write. Let's start a band. Hehehehe!!!!!! Any feedback is appreciated.
    Have a BE-YOU-TEE-FUL day!


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    dotsSilent Prayerdots
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    You left without a word
    You never said goodbye
    I never had the chance to say
    I'm sorry

    I wonder where you are
    I need to see you one last time
    To tell you how I feel
    But where you are?
    I do not know
    So I say a silent prayer

    (Chorus)
    Keep her safe from harm
    keep her in Your loving arms
    and let her find the way
    to all she's searching for
    Never let her go
    Never leave her cold
    And may she find the strength to face her fears
    And live another day

    You left me only memories
    Fading as the days goes by
    The warmth of your sweet embrace
    Your smile, I miss it so
    But where are you?
    Oh tell me please
    Lord I'm down on bended knees

    Chorus

    (Bridge)
    Baby I never meant to cause you pain
    Oh, never meant to hurt you
    Never meant to break your heart
    Oh...
    If you just give me one last chance
    To tell you what you mean to me
    My silent prayer for you (repeat)

    Keep her safe from harm
    Keep her in Your loving arms
    Let her find her way
    Let her find her way
    Back to me

    Chorus

    (Outro)
    A silent prayer for you




    Submitted on 2005-07-20 01:09:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love it. YOu have such a great gift. I think I read one of your other writes a couple days ago. But I think this is was better! Its really really beautiful. The name for this I like Silent Prayer. The whole meaning is for you to say a prayer and the prayer is to watch over this person, and make this person doesn't get hurt. But I really enjoyed it. It was differant and yet the same. You know what I mena. It was a beautiful write.

    The thing I thought you did the best with is the chorus, ccompletely amazing. I love it I had a rhythem going for it

    Keep her safe from harm
    keep her in Your loving arms
    and let her find the way
    to all she's searching for
    Never let her go
    Never leave her cold
    And may she find the strength to face her fears
    And live another day

    I think you did a really good job on that. I thought these lyrics had a great flow, for the parts that were rhymed you did a good job with that without making it seemed forced.

    Good Job
    Keep it up

    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is another beautiful piece of work. With your talent for writing I wish you all the luck in getting your songs recorded. The feelings you show is evident by asking the Lord to watch over her and protect her etc. That's coming straight from the heart. A beautiful write, a beautiful love song! I would love this one too! take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]


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