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    dots Submission Name: sodots
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    Author: bluesoxz
    ASL Info:    16fohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 71/101/38
    Words: 285
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotssodots
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    Surrender to the voices.
    Die to the goddess that
    Is before you..Steal the
    Sun from the sky so no
    Corrupted man can walk
    The earth.

    Blend in with evil and
    Become it.Take this
    Rag doll and beat it
    Once more. Flush this
    Away. Be reborn to
    Satan and call him daddy.
    Oh daddy how I love
    You.

    Diving in a pool of blood
    I see my self licking the
    Sweet taste off my skin
    Then doing it over again.
    I feel this heart with rage.
    I take one look at my
    Weakness then snap it
    In half.

    Fred for you addiction oh
    How I long to be numb.
    Fred for this pill To make
    These wounds become
    Fake until the numbness
    Goes away then its nothing
    But pain.

    Scared to admit your the
    one I think of everynight
    You touch my jaded heart
    And gave me something to
    Feel. Like candy I
    Cant get enough of you.
    Your taste sits in my mouth

    Im attached to the torture
    Of suicide.Make this go away.
    Wait dont..14 shades of blood
    Please tell me which one you
    Want.

    So gone off the pills
    So wasted of the images
    So depressed over my life.
    So stubborn to admit I need
    You in my life.
    So weak to ask for your
    Heart to keep me alive.
    So numb
    So nothing.
    So dead.





    Submitted on 2005-07-20 01:16:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good write I enjoyed reading it , good format,loved the repitiion it juss all game together well and great subject Iím sure we all feel like that sometimes But Iím No Talent check out some of my stuff sometime aight thanks
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]


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