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    dots Submission Name: When will I see you againdots
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    Author: K
    ASL Info:    26/Namibia/Africa
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 183/172/46
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 816
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1499



    Description:
       The things girls make men do !!!! Hehehe!!!!
    Lemm know what you think. Would especially like to know what the girls think. Hehehe!!!


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    dotsWhen will I see you againdots
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    It's been a while since I saw you girl
    Late at night I'm consumed by thoughts of you
    I wonder if we'll ever meet again
    I need to know 'cause these feelings won't give in
    Somehow I know that this was not chance
    Deep in my heart I feel that this is right
    I've fallen for you girl
    And I need to see you now

    (Chorus)
    When will I see your face again
    When will I know what my heart is in
    Time alone will tell
    When will I see your face again
    When will I find the way through
    When will I touch your skin
    Baby, when will I see you again

    Time goes on and you're still on my mind
    The days go by but your memory lingers on
    I wonder if you feel the same as I
    Please let me know 'cause these feelings won't subside
    Do you believe in love at first sight?
    I do now 'cause how else can this be right?
    I'm hung up on you baby
    Won't you come and light the way

    Chorus

    (Bridge)
    Oh oh baby
    I can't stop thinking about you
    You're always on my mind
    Won't you call me and just tell me
    That you feel the same
    Oh oooh

    Chorus

    (Outro)
    When will I see you again
    When will I see you again
    When will I see you again
    Baby, when will I see you again




    Submitted on 2005-07-20 01:28:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      If any man was to say that to me, I would certainly hold on to him...Hey this is a beautifully crafted piece...There's so much wonder in this one..The simplicity of the words are so captivating...You use simple words, but they give harmony to this write..You have meticulously painted the scene of a soul who is longing to be with that siginificant other and what more could the reader ask for...Moreover, one can feel the yearning inside the narrators heart, for he strongly converses his emotions...He opens himself unashamed of exposing his vulnerability, though some would mistake this element as a weakness, but this strongly shows that this soul is actually strong willed and is not afraid to be human..This is a wonderfully writen piece...Its very soothing and creates an incredible feeling inside the reader!A very SAGACIOUS write...Most thoroughly enjoyed!Be happy..Nobantu
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]
      I think there is a song for "Brian Mcknight" called "When will I see you again?"! But if my memory is correct and did not fail me then that song was not a love song! I remember that he was talking to God! Saying Lord...........! I think so!

    Anyway, that was a good simple lyrics, I liked it, the title is well chosen and captures the attentiopn of the readers like it did with me and that is one of the main reasons I choose what to read! The title!

    The description made me hesitate whether to stop and leave or to continue as you wanted girl's views! But I said I'll continue and read it and see whether I'll or will not comment and here I'm!

    The main chorus is solid and good, saying;

    "When will I see your face again
    When will I know what my heart is in
    Time alone will tell
    When will I see your face again
    When will I find the way through
    When will I touch your skin
    Baby, when will I see you again"

    But don't you think you have missed some question marks here?!

    And also in the finale;

    "(Outro)
    When will I see you again
    When will I see you again
    When will I see you again
    Baby, when will I see you again"!!

    Anyway, I liked it's simplicity and the way it flows.

    I hope you find my comment somehow helpful to you, and I'll end up my comment saying Good luck and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm I heard a song with that title again. Or pretty sure when will I see you again. I think so. Otherwise I am going crazy. Anyways your description made me laugh. I think girls go a "little" overboard with all their things they want their man to do.

    To me I think I liked all the verses and the bridge but the thing was I really didn't care for the lyrics. I thought they weren't original. They sound amazing. But its like I've heard that before. So thats the only thing I don't like.

    Other than that I think you did a good job, at making the title come alive. I think a lot of readers will enjoy reading these lyrics, and also kinda making a rhythem in their head.


    Keep it Up
    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, I like this! I bet it will sound good when you put the music to it. "Somehow I know this was not chance" This was the best line for me.
    Chance and destiny, wow! I hope he get to meet the young lady!lol...This was a great piece. you take care...wanda Oh! I would love a copy of this when you put it on a CD!
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]


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