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where are you??? my sanity!!!


Author: lainie75
ASL Info:    30/f/uk
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Words: 110
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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eeemmm i dont know really , what can i say its about me lol


where are you??? my sanity!!!



Why did you have to go.
Oh how , i miss you so.
I'm really not the same.
You left , but what did you gain.
Your out there on your own.
You left me all alone.
Please return to me , that is when you'll see.
Its you that holds the key.
where are you? , my sanity!!!

I've searched on high and low.
Theres not much further left to go.
I thought that you were there.
But everywhere looks bare.
Oh , i remeber now.
Although i dont remeber how.
I know no-ones to blame.
I've never had sanity,
I forgot i've always been insane.




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  haha! another funny thing by you. and this reminds me so much of myself, because truely i dont think i was every sane, and the sane ones are boring! i think this was awesome, great job
-steph
| Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]
  When I say the title, I just had to read this one and I am glad I did. Kinda tickled my funny bone! it reminds me of something I used to say all the time..."If I had a brain I would take it out and play with it." and another one I say is "don't ask me, my brain is on vacation."
DJ
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
  Now who is reading eachother mind? I want mine back to! I adore this. This was cute. I like the way you made it seem at first you were talking to a person. Smooth, Laine. I think you did good again.
Maggie
| Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  Great Read Line By line it all just came together good use of metaphors
And grammer Overall a Good read glad I had the chance to Enjoy it .By the way I’m
No Talent Check out some of my work sometime aight.
| Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
  This really just seem to come together, at first I thought you were talking about a person that left. Sometimes people can make you more sane than usual, but at the end I got it but It pretty good. This I think alot of people will be able to relate to it. That to me is pretty much the point of writing getting people to relate to something or just to make contact with them on a level that is different from the norm.
| Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by chemberdan | [ Reply to This ]
  Lol, Elaine, very cute little piece, that had me smiling all the way through and then cracked me up in the end!

Poetically it has a couple of flow glitches, but who cares? It's supposed to be amusing, not perfect!

It's a whimsical, crazy little poem.

I love it

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  Good write I enjoyed reading it , good format it juss all game together well and great subject I’m sure we all feel like that sometimes But I’m No Talent check out some of my stuff sometime aight thanks
| Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
  Ha-ha! What an amusing little poem this is! I think I have been here once or twice myself! The world and all the people in it can make you this way ya know! I hear ya! I really do! And an interesting ending to this as well! You're so crazy, you forgot you were crazy! Thanks for sharing!
Lorna
| Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  Okay, this is cute. I think you have the potential to really rock things, but you don't quite accomplish it... with me at least. Try being less literal with your words and find some figurative ways to express yourself. I like to use the example of "painting your feelings." And do so in an impressionistic fashion. You'll accomplish more. Again, these are my preferences. Seems like this was a fun write for you. Keep at it and you could really have something.

!n3pt
| Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by _n3pt | [ Reply to This ]


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