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    dots Submission Name: Ceremonial Sunsetdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
    Total Views: 658
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 169



    Description:
       This goes along with an ink drawing I did which, to me, was very Native American Indian influenced. If you've ever seen a Kachina Doll then it was like that and with a glowing sun and moon at top & bottom.

    The sun was setting at the river and a red tailed hawk was my spirit guide of illumination.

    Love,Peace,Joy!!! epiphany ; - }


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    dotsCeremonial Sunsetdots
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    Red Tailed Hawk
    Sunset
    Illuminated
    Flight
    Soaring Soul
    Spirit
    Guided
    Burning Bush
    Revealing
    TRUTH




    Submitted on 2005-07-20 15:39:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A lil strange @ first but i think this poems takes alil thinking and understanding to get i think i got it tho .Great Read Line By line it all just came together good use of metaphors
    And grammer Overall a Good read glad I had the chance to Enjoy it .By the way Iím
    No Talent Check out some of my work sometime aight.
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
      My God tiff 16 words and 18 views already wow!
    Well short and sweet but effective. To be able to pack so much meaning and imagery in so few words is amazing! Wonderful write!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a very terse piece. I always enjoy nature in poetry and have watched a red tailed hawk sitting just 25 ft from me at our lake house in Minnesota. Large birds of prey are certainly inspirational in their majesty and I can feel that inspiration in this poem. I think you express a very personal 'epiphany' in this writing and it comes through beautifully. Dan
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      Another obliquely beautiful work Tiff.

    It's almost as though you've cut all the other words from the lines of a poem, eft with the heart of the message.
    Like you, short and sweet!

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      In the way which Haikus attempt to ensnare through simplicity something so beautiful words should not be used to describe it, your poem aspire to describe the indescribable. I have always found simplicity to be the only way in which a person can convey insurmountable beauty. The only suggestion would be to remove the abstract idea of "Truth". Leave it up to the simple moment to convey abstract ideas. I love your poem though.
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by mr. | [ Reply to This ]


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