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    dots Submission Name: Is the Game worth living for?dots
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    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
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       This isnt me, thank god i dont have to worry about stuff like this. Its simply a dedication to kids who try to look forward to something else other than going home


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    dotsIs the Game worth living for?dots
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    Inside that fence, no abuse or tears are present
    Inside that fence, I realize that baseball
    was heaven sent

    No matter how many tears were cried at home
    When it was time to play,
    I knew they would be long gone
    My soul has found peace, on this hot and muggy day

    The sweat that pours feels much better to me
    than the apoligies after a beating,
    that try to decieve
    that leave me pondering, about the pain to succed

    A game played, its won or lost
    But no matter the stats, nobody will ever no
    MY LOSS
    It's sometimes blood, and always pain
    I could have won mvp, but it would never be a gain

    Young at heart, experienced in life
    Will never forget the true meaning of the game
    It will always provide me with dreams at night
    no matter the terror,
    as i think god for this day
    and a praise his name
    as I go to sleep to ponder my errors
    and the question: Is the game worth living to me?




    Submitted on 2005-07-20 16:36:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      part of me wishes kids didn't have to escape like that, but part of my thinks it's okay, if it keeps them going. There was a time when I would go anywhere just not to go home. I looked forward to school cause it got me out of the house. Nice write. I think it's a fave.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      i see you too are interested in kids who live through pain.. i don't give a damn about grammer..its well writte..i love the message...i just love it
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
      Welcome to Elite!

    I have to tell you how impressed I am...I'm glad that you never went through this, but you really tapped into those emotions in a very real way. You conveyed the pain of being home and the serenity of baseball quite well. You left your reader pondering what the boy decided to do at the end, leaving some room for their own creativity. Maybe someday you'll want to revisit this boy and tell another story about where he is after the fact? Not that it's not alright leaving things to the imagination...either way...great job! Look forward to more!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      I could relate to to this poem a lot. I grew up with a very abusing father and baseball was my savior, I would play it often and watch my Yankee's all the time, even to this day,when I am stress, all I have to think about is baseball and its goes away for a bit.

    Ty for this wonderful write.

    Edward
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      hey little man, welcome to the site and congrats on the first poem. its sad to see people going through so much trouble in their lives that they have to use such a good thing as baseball to escape good job once again and keep writing

    dylanpoe
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the way you use baseball as an escape to something that they want to get away from at home. for me baseball was away to get rid of my aggression than i blew my knee out and took up writing. but i never had a reason to not go home. it was just my escape from everyday stuff. anyway good job keep it up...Joy
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      It can be within any hobbie or activity that one can get themself lost in, in order to get away frow the truth of what lies just ahead. Whether it be a beating or arguing of the parents. You indeed have used wording well to explain what a child or being might di in order to defeat drama and hurt.

    Write on homie.>>>>>>>
    Brax...
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]


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