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    dots Submission Name: blood connectiondots
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    Author: painfullyme
    ASL Info:    23/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 335/456/72
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
    Total Views: 234
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 371



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    dotsblood connectiondots
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    deep the laceration
    that spreads across my neck
    scarring the tissue
    that conceals liquid life
    drink my lover
    consume these sanguine drops
    nourish your desire
    with my crimson offering
    yet leave a drop for me
    to sustain this mortal soul
    until it is time to depart
    from the temporal realm
    *




    Submitted on 2005-07-20 18:12:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a very good write about the similarities of vampirism and an all-consuming love. I don't know if it was intentional or not, but I feel a connection between cutting and offering your veins to your lover. This was the perfect length to make the point and maintain the necessary tension to create a picture in a singlre frame.
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, it sounds like something I would've written to my best friend.( very strange but wonderful relationship.) I like the fact that you'll give yourself to someone to satisfy themselves. I love the word usage and flow. It could be longer, it would make it a little better.
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by HECATE_Sservant | [ Reply to This ]



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