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I can't learn...


Author: painofthanatos
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old poem...not so sure if i like it...too much me in it, ya know?
luckily i'm a bit happier now. I think psychology class with the shrill woman is just enough to make anyone miserable...lol.
I just needed something new to post
anyway, tell me what you think


I can't learn...



In a class, drop spinning a stolen blue pen
She's lecturing us on memory,
but I've forgotten most of what she's said
I think all those hours of colouring my world with sharpies has gone to my head
I'm learning how to hate writing
And loathe reading
But I can't learn how to stop breathing

I've given up on finding someone to love
I've given up on trying to find a friend
But I can't seem to give up completely
And bring my life to an end
the over doses are never enough
And all the ropes I bring to my neck
Fall limp in my hands before I'm completely gone
And I have all of the bruises to prove it
Everytime I try to hold my head under the water
My mouth gasps for water before my mind can stop it

And now I'm giving up on giving up
Will I forever be a quitter
Succumbing to the misery of whatever is placed in front of me...?




Submitted on 2005-07-20 21:05:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  whoaaa courtney. i like this alot. u come up with awesome works. i know these things say not to give just compliments, but i really just love it and have nothing i think u should change about it.

_Stephanie_
| Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by roxygirl | [ Reply to This ]
  inspired by bobo's class? haha yea

[[She's lecturing us on memory,
but I've forgotten most of what she's said]]
haha good piece of irony

[[But I can't learn how to stop breathing]]
i thought that line was cool

[[My mouth gasps for water before my mind can stop it]]
did you mean "air" in place of "water"?

i liked this
sophie
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by sudie | [ Reply to This ]
  Giving up on giving up...good line. Kind of like sick and tired of being sick and tired. I liked the whole write and it was easy to get into. The feeling of not being able to give up was quite inspirational and just made it seem a little uplifting...is that weird...?
Have a good one and keep writin'
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  i like it... the first stanza is tops... it's very... cute.. it reminds me of a girl that means a lot me...

i think i like it, cause it shows a sence of humor... ya know... parts are said but it's pretty funny too...

She's lecturing us on memory,
but I've forgotten most of what she's said

thats a great line.. it made me laugh... i think with a little more work this could be great

just try and clear out your thoughts

give reasons for why you feel like that... this would help a lot in the seconds stanza...

this is a cool little poem

on the flipside
| Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this. I found the whole thing to be completely amazing. Your words described me perfectly. There is nothing I don't like about it. I have nothing negative to say. Great job

-nikkki
| Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  The first part, made me chuckle a little, I just got done doing summer psychology yesterday. And it made me kind of giggle. Lol. The end of it was cool. I was different from the beginning, but still good. And for this being some of your begining work, I can only imagine what awesome stuff you have now. Lol.
| Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]


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