dont leave me by myself gena! bcz then if u die i have to die to! and we still have to go to the oscar award and u have to marry usher in 2012! and i have to marry u know who in 2014 and then we have to look good together cuz thats the way its gonna be and u cant die!ok! anyway the poem was a little short but hey its not my problem if u want it that short be my guest cuz my poems are short! anyway love u soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much! and u probaly wont have the attention span to read this but ill still submit it! love ya! ~akaila evonne~
wow i like this alot i like the flow alot too. i know it hurt when you lose someone, especially your mother. the anticipation of the funeral is what get everyone. i hope you feel better and i hope everything goes well. keep up the awesome writes because i love to read your work. love tina
This was pretty good. The spelling errors really distract from the writing. The emotion, and your ability to paint the picture in my mind is excellent. If you were to fix the spelling and punctuation it would help it flow better. There also feels like maybe it should be just a little bit longer. It left me wanting more, which could be a good thing too because now I want to read more from you!! But good job and keep at it!!!