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Submission Name: Pink Plastic Razor dots

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Author:	Blindly-N-Love
ASL Info:	17/F
Elite Ratio:	4.61 - 197/141/29
Words:	193

Class/Type:	Story/Cutting or Mutilation
Total Views:	249
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1201

Description:
I wrote this in present tense. It's a little different, but I like this story. I hope you do too. If I made spelling errors, sry I typed it fast.

Pink Plastic Razor dots

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My purse wraped over my right sholder,
As I clench it tightly, walking to the bathroom.
I can no longer handle the pressure and stress of being a teen.
I need sometime to release it, some time to escape.
Into the bathrrom I open my purse inside a stall,
And pull out my plastic pink razor.
One cut leads to an epidemic on my arms.
Blood runs from its wounds, off of my fingertips.
With my left arm outstretched and my mouth opened wide.
I have to clench my teeth to prevent from screaming.
I open my purse once more.
Placing the razor back in.
I'm prepared this time.. With alchohol and cotton balls!
Hovering over the toilet, I pour the cold sanitizing liquid.
It burns more than walking over hot coals.
Grabbing the cotton and patting my arm, I freeze.
Someones in here, My teacher is looking for me.
She asks if Im ok. "Oh yes! I am perfectly fine."
I pull down my sleeve and exit the stall,
With my purse clenched tightly.
I leave this bathroom; My sanctuary,
Until next period, my next hell,
Where the ritual will begin again!!

Submitted on 2005-07-20 22:42:41 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I didn't like it. I read it 3 times thro and thru the fact that i can relate i didn't like the way you explained cutting. Cutting is used differently for you i suppose than me. For to me cutting is a release of pain(not stress) and it doesn't cause pain(like you say). You can read any of mine if you would like too.
Other than that the structure of it is good.
xoxo
Reeses
| Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
  In many native amgerican rituals when a loved one dies they cut themselves to show a actually way of letting go of all the pain and loss it's perfectly normal in degrees. Different people handle stress differently. And i understand the school part i was a very good student always passed tests but never did homework lol i'm glad to be out though. I really enjoyed the piece and as i am part native american i can relate to this kind of release.

Semper Fidelis,
Christopher
| Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
  This seemed an insight but I don't know if it is about you or not, if it is, it needs to written in a way that leaves no question in the readers' mind.
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't know, I didn't really like it. It felt superficial to me. Like you staged it. I mean no disrespect, it just wasn't something that I felt as I read it. Maybe rework it? Of course, I could be the one oddball that doesn't really like it, so don't listen to me.
| Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
  This is good. I like the wording and descriptions. Good thinking keeping the alcohol and cotton balls in your purse too. Most people who cut don't really think or care about it getting all infected and stuff. When I used to do that, I thought about it, but I didn't care. I stopped though. I guess it was a good idea. But I didn't really stop for the right reasons. I only did because I hated the scars. I'm getting tired of always having to wear long sleeves to cover it, you know? But I've replaced that habit with other bad ones instead. Now I smoke too much. Oh boyy. But anyways, I usually don't like reading stories on here because they can never hold my attention. This did though. It was good. I like it a lot. Good luck with everything.

-nikkki
| Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  A nice peice. Different to the usual 'excuse me whilst I sit in the corner and cry blood tears' stuff that, frankly, makes me want to drink bleach. 20 style points to you! However, i do think you could do more with the description, all the same it's a good peice for a quick silencing read.
~ Uriel
| Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Uriel | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a very defeating poem... but i know what you mean... not the cutting up nessarly... are at least not very often... but i know what it's like to feel this way... and to beat your self up inside... my razor is writing

i dont know

i like the poem

on the flipside
-DS
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]

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