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    dots Submission Name: Creation Wavedots
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    Author: Ratmeat
    ASL Info:    25/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 200/222/61
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 346
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 652



    Description:
       it's hot, I'm drinking , and plan to write a song


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    dotsCreation Wavedots
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    hangin' like wet tortillas
    on slippery wormlike wires
    skin on the ooze as if yellow escaped
    from grilled cheese
    just to be frizzled by sizzling iron

    gasping mouth holes
    refrain from sponge activation
    except for blue and white cans
    and translucent fun poison
    let out of bubbled glasswork

    computerised rock n' roll
    runnin through raised veins
    sweat and chemical breath
    deteriorise the chains

    time for creation
    one more drink
    then water and ice
    might be nice
    1,2,3, Go!






    Submitted on 2005-07-20 23:06:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Despite the irregularity of this, and how confusing it is, the images are very vivid.

    I see grass. People wearing sunglasses, complaining about the heat, eating greasy food.

    But I think it could be better. Good start. Keep it up.

    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
      that made no sence to me. i dont know what it is i think their might be to many ideas jumbled together but i couldnt understand it.
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]



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