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    dots Submission Name: Creation's Dawndots

    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1348/375
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 747
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       ABAAB format; doubled rhyme each line; eight syllables per line.

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    dotsCreation's Dawndots

    Creation's dawn with nightshades drawn,
    soft passions show ere morning's glow
    and stretch upon a new moist lawn.
    Swift shadows fawn the first light's yawn.
    Life wakes to sow God's fertile flow.

    The Gadfly

    Submitted on 2005-07-21 06:47:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A lovely poem with a great format! I like the style you used here and morning twilight is such splendor. I love the dawn and all that it brings. The few birds that can be heard in the distance as the sky begins to lighten from dark blue to a subtle lighter shade until finally a glorious sunrise and the birth of a new day. The grass always has that dampness from the dew upon it and it is such a calming atmosphere. Ahhh...you have given me wonderful visuals with this short yet great poem! Thanks. Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Free form is the easiest way to let the mind release and spill upon a piece of paper. Thanks for keeping things technical, something I rarely try in your sense. I've been wanting to push myself into more constructive writing, building lines instead of puking them onto a page, but I can't seem to find the patience. Keep keepin' it alive, especially on this site where the majority is free form.
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by mr. | [ Reply to This ]
      COulda been a lil longer but all and all Great Read Line By line it all just came together good use of metaphors
    And grammer Overall a Good read glad I had the chance to Enjoy it .By the way Iím
    No Talent Check out some of my work sometime aight.
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not totally sure what the message is in this piece. But I enjoyed reading how it rhymed! I think that it takes quite a bit of time and talent to do it with such rhythem, and actually stick to it. Well if there is a meaning to this maybe you can write me and let me know. Thanks.
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice, very nice piece. However, I do also wish it were just a little bit longer, if not one more line. The last line almost leaves me hanging...but I must confess, this is the first poem I've read so far on this site that was rhyme-based and that actually sounded good all the way through...hence, i give you credit for that. Good job!
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Skeletor | [ Reply to This ]

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