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    dots Submission Name: Over Youdots

    Author: K
    ASL Info:    26/Namibia/Africa
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 183/172/46
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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       The 3rd song I ever wrote. Off all songs this I can hear perfectly clear in my head. It's upbeat pop and electric quitar... Hehehe!!!!! Wrote this for the songwriters competition. I wanted to show my versatility and write a song for a chick!!!!!! Tell me how off par I am. Hehehehe!!!!!! Thanks.

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    dotsOver Youdots

    Over you like yesterday
    No, I won't be mistreated
    Refuse to be misleaded (yeah)
    Over you like never before
    And I know I'm gonna make it
    'cause I'm
    Over you

    Never thought that I would feel this way again
    Never thought that I would make it through the pain
    Always thought that I depended upon you
    Never knew that this life could be so cruel
    But now I'm stronger than before
    And baby guess what
    I am


    Baby, I don't know just why you did me wrong
    Why you lied to me and played me all along
    Always thought that you would be the one for me
    Now I know that that was just a fantasy
    It took a while to see the truth
    But I'm finally free
    That's right

    Baby why
    Did you have to go and lie
    You made me feel so lonely inside
    And why did you have to play the fool
    When you knew that you were going away
    Did you think I'd crumble and die
    No, not me

    Chorus (repeat)

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      Hi I always have trouble imagining songs if i havent heard them, it's not so bad if I know what chords go with the song, it can give me some idea. I write songs sometimes, but for me it's always the chords that come first then the words fit the song...I can never manage to do it the other way around.

    Do you write music as well, or do you see yourself as a lyricist?
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
      Did you think I'd crumble and die
    No, not me

    this sounds too "i will survive" lyrics for me but then i know so many songs and their lyrics by heart and since i think in songs im always making connections to songs in everything so yeah... but yeah... this part is so "did ya think id crumble did ya think id lay down and die oh no not i.." ya see?

    so this is your third ever song... good for you...
    i think the whole im over you like yesterday is kinda cool... i dont think ive heard it quite like that before so if i was wearing a hat id take it off and yet... how many ppl are truely over yesterday? so many ppl are stuck living in the past so to say im over you like yesterday can mean on one day "whats your name again" and another "oh how i miss you (yesterday)" but thats cool... open for interpretation...

    i think the working through of emotions and all through this song is good... you kinda start off broken but then you have that ive come through this and i am stronger than i was thing going on and thats what its all about... what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger and thats something to sing about if anything i guess...

    so yup... on the whole this ok... like i said already tonight though im not a pop music kinda gal but this is cool... i hope your stll writing lyrics
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      oooh i like. has a real "you lose sucker" feel to it and that's cool and uplifting. it seems mainstream, but don't listen to me cause i haven't heard the song. and hey, mainstream isn't neccessarily a bad thing anyways. i like how it is kindof a visual writing too. made me feel happy.

    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by chalky | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow I completely love this. Another one of your excellent work.. Prettty pretty good. Anyways I love the topic cause another topic that mostly anyone can relate to. Or most people. anyways I think you did a really good job on it. I think out of all your lyrics I like this the most. today I am reading some itneresting and alive writes.

    Anyways I really enjoyed reading the chorus. Overall I liked it.. I enjoyed reading the verses, and actually singing somewhat to it. Love the bridge very strong..

    Again overall you did a good job.. I can't find anything wrong with it..



    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, while i was reading i was trying to put it to music which i do with alot of songs i read on here. But yours is the first one i've found so far that i could actually do it completely with. The only part i can really offer a suggestion with is

    Never thought that I would feel this way again
    Never thought that I would make it through the pain
    Always thought that I depended upon you
    Never knew that this life could be so cruel

    Never, is getting kind of repetetive there. Perhaps replacing the second one with

    Never thought that I would feel this way again
    impossible that I would make it through the pain
    Always thought that I depended upon you
    Never knew that this life could be so cruel

    just a suggesting

    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by WandWielder | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi! Well...Mr Songwriter! You did it again. Your writes are really good. I'm glad you decided to write one for a "female"(chick).lol! I'm going to jump to the ending...yes, indeed! "Did you think I'll crumble and die" No, not me, Yeah...this was great! A strong side of a female ,yes. I like this because I'm a female!lol. I have no complaints about your write. Keep the CDs coming! take care wanda
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]

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