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Over You


Author: K
ASL Info:    26/Namibia/Africa
Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 183 /172 /46
Words: 185
Class/Type: Lyrics /Serious
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The 3rd song I ever wrote. Off all songs this I can hear perfectly clear in my head. It's upbeat pop and electric quitar... Hehehe!!!!! Wrote this for the songwriters competition. I wanted to show my versatility and write a song for a chick!!!!!! Tell me how off par I am. Hehehehe!!!!!! Thanks.


Over You



(Chorus)
Over you like yesterday
No, I won't be mistreated
Refuse to be misleaded (yeah)
Over you like never before
And I know I'm gonna make it
'cause I'm
Over you

Never thought that I would feel this way again
Never thought that I would make it through the pain
Always thought that I depended upon you
Never knew that this life could be so cruel
But now I'm stronger than before
And baby guess what
I am

Chorus

Baby, I don't know just why you did me wrong
Why you lied to me and played me all along
Always thought that you would be the one for me
Now I know that that was just a fantasy
It took a while to see the truth
But I'm finally free
That's right

Chorus
(Bridge)
Baby why
Did you have to go and lie
You made me feel so lonely inside
And why did you have to play the fool
When you knew that you were going away
Did you think I'd crumble and die
No, not me
Yeah

Chorus (repeat)




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  Hi I always have trouble imagining songs if i havent heard them, it's not so bad if I know what chords go with the song, it can give me some idea. I write songs sometimes, but for me it's always the chords that come first then the words fit the song...I can never manage to do it the other way around.

Do you write music as well, or do you see yourself as a lyricist?
| Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
  Did you think I'd crumble and die
No, not me

this sounds too "i will survive" lyrics for me but then i know so many songs and their lyrics by heart and since i think in songs im always making connections to songs in everything so yeah... but yeah... this part is so "did ya think id crumble did ya think id lay down and die oh no not i.." ya see?

so this is your third ever song... good for you...
i think the whole im over you like yesterday is kinda cool... i dont think ive heard it quite like that before so if i was wearing a hat id take it off and yet... how many ppl are truely over yesterday? so many ppl are stuck living in the past so to say im over you like yesterday can mean on one day "whats your name again" and another "oh how i miss you (yesterday)" but thats cool... open for interpretation...

i think the working through of emotions and all through this song is good... you kinda start off broken but then you have that ive come through this and i am stronger than i was thing going on and thats what its all about... what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger and thats something to sing about if anything i guess...

so yup... on the whole this ok... like i said already tonight though im not a pop music kinda gal but this is cool... i hope your stll writing lyrics
| Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  oooh i like. has a real "you lose sucker" feel to it and that's cool and uplifting. it seems mainstream, but don't listen to me cause i haven't heard the song. and hey, mainstream isn't neccessarily a bad thing anyways. i like how it is kindof a visual writing too. made me feel happy.

-t
| Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by chalky | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow I completely love this. Another one of your excellent work.. Prettty pretty good. Anyways I love the topic cause another topic that mostly anyone can relate to. Or most people. anyways I think you did a really good job on it. I think out of all your lyrics I like this the most. today I am reading some itneresting and alive writes.

Anyways I really enjoyed reading the chorus. Overall I liked it.. I enjoyed reading the verses, and actually singing somewhat to it. Love the bridge very strong..

Again overall you did a good job.. I can't find anything wrong with it..

Bravo


GOOOD WRITE
KEEP WRITING

Stephanie
| Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it, while i was reading i was trying to put it to music which i do with alot of songs i read on here. But yours is the first one i've found so far that i could actually do it completely with. The only part i can really offer a suggestion with is

Never thought that I would feel this way again
Never thought that I would make it through the pain
Always thought that I depended upon you
Never knew that this life could be so cruel

Never, is getting kind of repetetive there. Perhaps replacing the second one with

Never thought that I would feel this way again
impossible that I would make it through the pain
Always thought that I depended upon you
Never knew that this life could be so cruel

just a suggesting

<wandwielder>
| Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by WandWielder | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi! Well...Mr Songwriter! You did it again. Your writes are really good. I'm glad you decided to write one for a "female"(chick).lol! I'm going to jump to the ending...yes, indeed! "Did you think I'll crumble and die" No, not me, Yeah...this was great! A strong side of a female ,yes. I like this because I'm a female!lol. I have no complaints about your write. Keep the CDs coming! take care wanda
| Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]


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