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    dots Submission Name: God Grinneddots

    Author: isselman2001
    Elite Ratio:    5.38 - 37/47/46
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGod Grinneddots

    God sneezed

    And bees buzzed
    Mountains moved
    And trees trembled
    Seas splashed
    Winds whirled
    Tornadoes twirled
    And wanderers wondered why valleys waved
    Creeks cracked
    Caves caved
    And streets stacked
    Hurricanes hurled
    Creams curled
    Forests flamed
    Dictators declaimed
    Clocks stopped
    And bubbles popped
    Widows waned
    Insanity reigned
    Chaos caned children who disobeyed
    Ooze oozed from ogles that watched
    As bystanders turned into a splotch
    And runners rapidly ran
    From vomiting volcanoes
    That spewed sprawling spit
    While creepy critters carefully crept
    Amidst silent souls that peacefully slept
    And mighty men marched
    Through steep spiraling streets
    With wild whirling wind

    And God grinned

    Submitted on 2005-07-21 12:52:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with everyone else; this is like a story to tell unsuspecting children (who don't know any better) when you don't really want to think too much. I IS a lot more fun than actually thinking about the scientific implications involved. It is so simple: God sneezed. Boy, and we can't even say 'God bless you!' when that happens! What would be the point? Anyway, about the poem. I fell in love with the poem after 'bees buzzed'. I knew then that this poem was going to be one of those things that you really just read for fun. The images were so funny that I even caught myself grinning near the end there. No wonder God grinned! I truely appreciated how lighthearted it is--its so nice to find a partner in crime Even thought your previous reviewers would point out the things that they didn't understand, I will not, because the nonsensical feel to it is only increased when you get all Dr. Seuss-ish and write nonesense! I think I will add this to my favs. because it will constantly remind me to keep it simple, keep it nonesensical, and keep it smiling! Thanks for that. I hope that we will continue to bounce reviews back and forth-Thanks for the review of Eggman by the way. One of the writers on here wrote about Shiny Things, so I wrote about eggman! Lol, it was pretty fun.

    | Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by Maevity | [ Reply to This ]
      its a nice refreshing breath from alot of the poems today. its hard to critique a poem when someone is speaking of God... you kind of lost me on bubbles popped but thats alright.
    i really liked the end "God grinned", as if to say it was all exspected anyway. which of course it was an yet He/She still found humor in our course of events...

    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by elohimswork | [ Reply to This ]
      God Bless him! I enjoyed this! Just think if that was true...Hopefully God don't catch a cold. Reminds me when I was young...thunder was God bowling! The waves in the sea was God flushing the toilet! Rain, God crying! Lightning, God taking a picture etc, The only thing I couldn't figure out in your poem was: Creams curled...duh! I don't understand that one. Let me know what you mean. Other than that the poem was a good piece with a touch of humor. Great write!...wanda
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      a agree with bigfineq, this was a little enjoyable poem...something for children when they do ask those questions...hmm...I remember those..."why does it rain", because God is crying...hah! i use to believe that and tell all my friends...So what happens when God Grins...
    This was great...memories are overflowing...
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by idlewriter | [ Reply to This ]

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