Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Winged Maiden Moondots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 717
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 567



    Description:
       A night-time swim with the moon in the river of Life.

    Love,Peace,Joy!!!


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWinged Maiden Moondots
    -------------------------------------------


    Rising Lunar Princess
    lovely Winged Maiden Moon
    light of the dark sky

    Angelic clouds
    enveloped
    into the night fly

    Celestial mistress
    Matron of the stars
    beauty in full

    Guardian of eventide
    Goddess of the night
    like the tides you pull

    Lead us
    to sweet slumber's beach
    of dreams

    Shower us
    in goodness
    with your reaching beams













    Submitted on 2005-07-21 16:25:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I love this. I love your title, I love the feel. The whole thing is mystic and very magical to me. It seems like a prayer in a fantasy world, and I like it. The entire thing was very lightly done and very full of feel. Great write.
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful, Tiffany. I remember sailing at night during full moon, and seeing the moon's reflection on the rippled waves.
    I would think of this as visual, your images are very real, but also as an anthem of thanks to the keeper of the night.

    Full moon happened just last week and it is horrible how some people become so disoriented. Darkness does contain the Divine, faith keeps it alive. Thanks for sharing this one.
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Short but sweet right to the point I love it, Great Read Line By line it all just came together good use of metaphors
    And grammer Overall a Good read glad I had the chance to Enjoy it .By the way Iím
    No Talent Check out some of my work sometime aight.
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
      This was just lovely Tiff. I really like the image it depicts. It's extremely poetically written. One of your best, in my opinion.

    I'd switch the last two stanzas to end it with "dreams" .. but that's just me.

    A very well written and beautiful piece.

    Love, Peace, Joy, back to YOU

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      You know...I just realized that there aren't enough poems that pay homage to the moon, unless they're dark poems. Not that there aren't any, but this was really beautiful. I enjoyed it immensely! It was an easy and enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      Reminds me of a few nights ago when I was swimming at the beach and the moon was shining. I really like this poem, its relaxing. I especially like the 3rd and 4th stanzas. Ok, honestly, I have no bad comments. I really have nothing else to say either. This was a good write, and I liked it!
    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    67472

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Love written by saartha
    Dream written by closetpoet
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Redemption written by poetotoe
    Shi written by ShyOne
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    untitled written by ShyOne
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    Suffer The Children written by poetotoe
    The World written by jjd
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    prison written by ShyOne
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Etiquette written by saartha

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry