The third stanza was my favorite. Just makes me laugh. The closest thing to this I've written is probably "F**k You". I can identify with the feeling, as I think just about everyone can. Nicely done kid.
Wow! I think you may have been really pissed off when you wrote this one huh?? All the power to ya! I hear ya too! Sometimes people just piss ya off to no end especially when it comes to matters of the heart! Being hurt really sucks and can bring about really hostile emotions! I can admit I have thought horrible things about people and wished awful things upon them but I don't think I could actually do it myself! I like how you got all this out in your write though! Very therapeutic ya know? I hope you are feeling better today! Have a smile on me!
Great Read Line By line it all just came together good use of metaphors And grammer Overall a Good read glad I had the chance to Enjoy it .By the way Iím No Talent Check out some of my work sometime aight.
damn..i know i get angry... but you should never hurt a girl..i'm telling you... when i was in 7th grade i got punch by a 8th grade boy..that same day he got beat up my my bro..and my bro is in a crew so he got jump by his crew, and most of my guy friends wanted to beat him up the next day at school.. well i do think of killin my ex if he comes back to las vegas..and abraham and michael..yeah those are the one i'm planing to kill..lol..jk...i loved this poem.loved the angerness..and i'm adding it to my fav kay
That's some anger at someone...well expressed, I'm not one to say much about grammar errors - hell when you are typing something this emotional - the hands are barely keeping up with the mind. I liked the whole piece, but it was your first verse that really says it all for me
wow tons of raw emotion in this peice. not that its bad or anything cuz it allows the reader to relate better. so other than a few grammatical errors i thought it was great. good job once again keep it up i hope to read more...Joy
Great emotion. A little grammar errors, but seeing where they are it certainly fits. This reminds me of one of my poems...but I think I deleted it. And hey, I hope to be a psychologist one day! (not really, but something close to it) That's all I really have to say, good job ~Kat (By the way, hyporglo's quote is hilarious)
wow...you seem a bit pissed off in this piece here. Not to say I haven't dreamt of slaying the beast once in a great while. Just to clarify things...did you mean breathe your last breath? Just checking, once it got that far I got a little confused. Either way you got the point across that you were just slightly upset. Good job! Candi