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    dots Submission Name: I'm truly sorrydots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 635
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    Bytes: 717



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       I wrote this shit when I cheated on my girlfriend...hope you like it


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    dotsI'm truly sorrydots
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    i'm sorry for tricking you i'm sorry for lyin
    I'm sorry for being the cause of your crying
    i want to make it better but I can so I wont be trying
    my guilt has got me lying on the floor
    praying to god that for a chance, just one more
    I promise that I won't mess up, not agian
    It hurts me to see what it is that I've done
    I know you said just one more
    But that was before
    just say once more one more time
    if you do then that will serve the purpose of this read rhyme
    will you just tell me you forgive me, if you dont I understand
    you will see just why I ask this, will you let me see your hand?





    Submitted on 2005-07-21 22:40:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was sweet! im glad she forgave you! when i cheated on my boyfriend...telling him was the worst. but he forgave me... just never do it again...itll be good...good luck!
    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well at least something productive came out of it. That's all I have to say about this. I take cheating very seriously and would normally hate anyone who has or will. You have realised you have done wrong, which is more than can be said for some people. Welcome to the site and I hope you continue to write and express your emotions.
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great write, a nice flow to it. It made me feel truly sad, almost as though I was torn between his guilt and her grudge. It was pretty clear overall and it reminded me of some of my past experiences. I deffinantly want to keep reading your stuff...It's all very original.
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      This may not have moved me to feel deeply sympathetic towards the speaker...but I felt both angry and sad...good work drawing out the emotions...half the battle.
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by suneideises | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this a lot...I can relate to it...I cheated on my boyfriend recently...I regret it so much and I want to make it up to him but i don't know how...After he found out...I prayed...I don't belive in praying..but I did...I was willing to do anything to have another chance...I now have one...so I guess I will see if it works out...
    I liked this poem a lot...
    Very good job

    ...jessie...
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]


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