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    dots Submission Name: do you know?dots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       something I wrote when I first had problems with depression



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    dotsdo you know?dots
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    do you know what it's like to be dead inside
    Like everything there you have hide
    don't want to put trust in someone else
    Because you know that you wont fail yourself
    until that day you realize
    your entire life has been a lie
    when that day comes you hate yoursef
    but you can trust nobody else
    from that point on you want to die
    and forever you will wonder why




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      i know exactly what you mean, i've gone thru the feeling and think it alot... i like the rythem of it good job! i'm sorry you have had to go thru this.. its hell and i wish no one had to i really do
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
      i know exactly how you feel i was living a lie for a long time but now iam out and proud iam not saying ur gay iam just saying i can relate to the living a lie part over all i love ur poem and really don't find it nessary to give you any pointers your a better write then me.
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...short and sweet...nice job...i liked this it really kinda threw ur self out there...i cant say its the best ive read of your work tho.. but its still kicks ass!lol!

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    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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