This is a good insomnia write! I wrote one of these myself! Doesn't it suck when you can't sleep! You never realize how long the night is until you can't sleep. Whenever I have things on my mind I end up thinking and thinking and not sleeping! Stress keeps me up! I know about the silence, it is deafening! You did a nice job writing this! I can feel the frustration in your words! Nice poem! Take care!
I like how you opened and closed with the same line. I too have a poem that I wrote called "Insomnia". I haven't posted it as of yet, but I really liked your piece. You conveyed a good amount of torment in a very short amount of time and kept the feel of what you were talking about through the whole poem. Great write! Candi