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    dots Submission Name: insomniadots
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    Author: bluecrane
    ASL Info:    19/F/WASHINGTON
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 70/83/26
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       im an insomniac... i guess someones bound to figure that out.


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    too many thoughts run through my head
    when night begins to fall
    so many things that need to be said
    but no words come at all

    thoughts of love, death, deciet
    sneak in one at a time
    horrors of my broken defeat
    desperately linger in my mind

    images and voices taunt me
    i walk this house at night
    the silence is so haunting
    morning comes, another daylight

    too many things that need to be finished
    so many words that need to be said
    so many times you never listen
    too many thoughts run through my head




    Submitted on 2005-07-22 04:09:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought this was a rhythmic piece and you got the message across well. A lot of creative people deal with insomnia & I hope you end up getting some good rest!
    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good insomnia write! I wrote one of these myself! Doesn't it suck when you can't sleep! You never realize how long the night is until you can't sleep. Whenever I have things on my mind I end up thinking and thinking and not sleeping! Stress keeps me up! I know about the silence, it is deafening! You did a nice job writing this! I can feel the frustration in your words! Nice poem! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how you opened and closed with the same line. I too have a poem that I wrote called "Insomnia". I haven't posted it as of yet, but I really liked your piece. You conveyed a good amount of torment in a very short amount of time and kept the feel of what you were talking about through the whole poem. Great write!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      Well me too I have the same problem. I have found that 100mg of Trazadome about an hour before bedtime works wonders though.
    So, here's to a good poem and a good nights sleep.
    !Doc`
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]


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