Description: Just lookin for some publisity i guess this one i wrote after jared dumped me and i still need to know that he is never commin back and i hope he never does.
but joust do as you wish with it
I Wish... -------------------------------------------
Oh how i whish you would return
And wipe the tears from my eyes.
You'd tell me things would be just fine
As you held me in your arms.
To dream sweet dreams of better times.
Just like you did before.
And with the morning light
You would wake me with a kiss.
Amd whisper how you wish this moment lasted forever.
But I know within my heart that day may never Return for you had to go you had no choice.
My first taste of love so, bitter sweet.
And quick to leave a a tough lesson learned.
Somehow I know when you whispered those Words that early summer's morn, you meant Every word.
And that you would say them again given the chance.
well this was an honest piece. I would like to point out your typos though, first line whish...and line nine the word amd...
This post was a tad bit hard on the reader you seem to jump from past tense to present too much...ex:"Oh how i whish you would return And wipe the tears from my eyes. You'd tell me things would be just fine As you held me in your arms."
I think it would read better if you just changed some words around "Oh how i wish you would return to wipe the tears from my eyes. Tell me everything will be just fine as you hold me in your arms."
I'm not sure if you intend to revise this or not so I will only critique on that portion of the post.
You know...the easiest thing is loving and the hardest is letting go...much of luck to you for that process...(yes it is a process)
Samm I like this a lot. I'm just wonderin who is this abt? But I do like it. Keep it up girl. U will be a good writer. In fact u r a good writer already. I guess I like all ur writings but their good thats y. Talk to u later. Bye. Ur friend Andrew.
Submission Name: I Wish...
