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    dots Submission Name: I'm Gonna...dots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Misc/Comedy
    Total Views: 511
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    Bytes: 1674



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       This one's for Jaz.


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    dotsI'm Gonna...dots
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    Don't you dare take that pill
    To this she said, "I'm gonna...
    My name is Willygover, bitch,
    I do what I wanna."

    Who the hell is that on the phone?
    "Your mom!" she says with a grin.
    I just sigh and shake my head
    Walk away before she says it again.

    We're playing a game on the PS2
    And for once, I'm winning.
    Then she punches me in the arm
    And gleefully yells, "Just kidding!"

    "I'm so bored," she says
    "Let's go to Food World!"
    THen she proceeds to brush out the hair
    That I paid twenty bucks to have cut and curled.

    "Mc-Chic-Ken," she whispers.
    The she shouts, "I won!"
    She does the thug dance in celebration.
    We always have a lot of fun.

    "Let's go to Unclaimed Baggage," she says,
    "Let's go to Wal-Mart."
    "He said shiny-on-a-stick!"
    "Nick Blackwell's pushing shopping carts!"

    "Let's go to Burger King!" she says
    "I need to see Wyatt."
    Could you chill for just a second?
    You're gonna cause a riot.

    She sits and reads the list
    Of all the boys that have kissed her
    What a crazy day it's been.
    But that's life with my sister.

    "Why don't you make life a musical?"
    To this she says, "I'm gonna...
    My name is Willygover, bitch!
    I do what I wanna."




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      wow. i was going through my favs and i still love this as much as i did then i'm going to read more by you. keep up the awsome work.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      ha ha. i love this. wow. this is so cool at first i though t it would be about a daughter but your sister?! wow this is awesome. i know how much trouble they can be but in the end we all love them. keep up the great writes. wow i love this so much. i know that a lot of people can and will and do relatye to this. i've got two younger sibs and you descibed them perfectly. like i said keep up the awesome work!

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    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      INTERESTING....its very unique, never seem a work like this so you should be proud for being sooo original! GREAT JOB
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by anita_89 | [ Reply to This ]
      What a sister you have. I have 3 of them. And we had similar battles. You made this realistic. And it was your history so it made it even better. You did a good job writing this. I think it is cute and all sisters can relate to this.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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