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    dots Submission Name: That Kissdots
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    Author: anita_89
    ASL Info:    18/F/Brazil
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 145/200/42
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       <3....great guy, and great kiss


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    dotsThat Kissdots
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    That kiss
    That made my knees tremble
    And made me almost fall
    That kiss
    That made it imposible to stop
    And open my eyes
    That kiss
    That made me fall for you
    That kiss
    That made me say
    YES, YES, YES, YES.

    That kiss
    That made me love you
    The kiss of love
    Your kiss
    The kiss
    From your lips
    Beautiful lips that touched my lips
    Beautiful tongue that
    Touched my tongue
    Played
    With my tongue
    That kiss, the kiss…
    Your kiss…




    Submitted on 2005-07-22 11:25:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this too! Totally made me smile...made me think back to my first kiss. Made me think of my boyfriend. And I mean some things you just never forget...like THAT KISS...the kiss just...took your breath away...and made ya fall in love. Great job...thanks for bringing back some memories! :) ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      Hola ana! ok this poem was interesting. Yeah is it about Henrique? or Didi? (dont worry no one from school reads your poems so you can chill...) yeah I kind of have a poem called the same title but whatever it was just really wierd in this part:

    That kiss
    That made me say
    YES, YES, YES, YES.

    sounds like you were having just a little bit more than "a kiss" O.o yeah ok you also had a couple spelling mistakes but I'm too lazy to actually scroll up ok whatever chau
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by nj | [ Reply to This ]
      I am truly impressed! I am totally amazed at how you transformed it into a general kiss, into a specific kiss. "That kiss, the kiss, YOUR kiss.." Great way to make a poem personalized. I think the typos are simple errors, but the poem in itself was absolutely great!

    Alley-Kat <3
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by Dark Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      This was nice. Amazing what a kiss can do. You had a couple typos, tremble, "That made my love you" should be made me. Past that, this was great poem. A great flow. I enjoyed reading this.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good... i enjoyed that kiss also. and this piece pretty much hits it on the preverbial nail, hitting the heartfelt emotions that is involved with that special moment that is twisted with that perfect kiss.. enjoyed reading this good job
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a great poem and i truly hope you keep up the awesome work. love is a beautiful thing but try to be careful. not everyone believes in it. i love this piece and i do hope to see more by you in the future. i hope you write more on this subject. it helps people out there who have been hurt by love. it lets them know that its still out there and thats people out there can still have feelings and trust. keep up the awesome work. and stay with the awesome kisses!
    love tina


    (ps my name here is ladiesplanet1 so if you have any ?'s write me there! awesome write, like i said. keep it up!)
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by zack | [ Reply to This ]


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