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    dots Submission Name: THE FIGHT SONG: INTRODUCTIONdots

    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is just something that i believe that people who are going through a "depressed about the world mood" can relate to. bout standing up and getting whats yours not waiting on anybody else to bring it to you. any thoughts or comments would be appreciaited

    there is a part 2 coming soon

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    People ask me:

    What do you believe?
    Do you think you could write something for me?

    I belive in standing up for you
    Cause only you know, what's true
    So many people think!!!!
    Why don't they take the time out
    and sacrifice some of that god-given ink
    Why must they live life till they sink

    Most people are satisfied
    with being led by a puppeter
    thats because they are engulfed with fear
    Expression is to hard,
    They'd much rather show their fear

    Declarations need to be made
    from the meek, so they can live another day
    Taking the darkness away from dark
    get off of societies boat, catch a ride on realitys ark

    You want me to write for you?
    you better off holding your breath
    till you blue
    Solemnpen writes for soldiers who fight
    not pussies to scared to go to sleep at night
    Nobodys angry, heres a smile :)
    The road is long, its an eternal mile
    So put your walking shoes on,
    throw up your middle finger
    and wait for the fight song.........


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      blunt, very much so, straight to the point. but it seems more like a rebutle, or a speach to all those you thought of in the making of this. people need to stand up, ect. ok, but not everybody shares that perspective, or perhaps some girl out there is too timid because she was beaten and raped by her father for 12 years, while her moms in hell burning because of a crack overdose, you know just the otherside of the table. not that i disagree, i just feel that everyone has there own ways, take care.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good. Everyone needs to learn to stand up for themselves, but standing up for a friend isn't always bad. The flow was easy to read.
    I just have to ask...do u personally know lost omen(tyrone), unknown soldier(troy), wishicouldwrite(jason) or aknahlij_d 1(pj)???
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to say, I enjoyed reading this. I sort of found it to be serious and humorous at the same time.

    Great line here - > "get off of societies boat, catch a ride on realitys ark"

    It might sound a bit preachy(?) to some of us who have written sad/depressed poems... but the jist of it all was, in my opinion, well intended and likeable.

    "Solemnpen writes for soldiers who fight
    not pussies to scared to go to sleep at night
    Nobodys angry, heres a smile :)
    The road is long, its an eternal mile" < - I got a giggle out of that one...lol.

    But hey, what you said is true... you gotta stand up and get what's yours, and not wait for anybody else to bring it.

    Take care,
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]

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