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    dots Submission Name: my dreamsdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Dark
    Total Views: 813
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1248



    Description:
       this is a dream I have over and over again that I decided to put in poem/lyrics form


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    dotsmy dreamsdots
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    Now I've been watchin the girl for several days
    something about her eyes put me in a days
    and it make me, fuckin crazy
    This cant be the work of cupid
    I dont even know her Stupid!
    this bitch got me feelin strange
    some power that made me change
    but that shits impossible there for I cant believe it
    my mind can be decievin, and so that must be it
    shanxxx mind playin trix on'em
    yep, wait no there she is again
    theres somethin in themhazel eyes that make me wanna get up in
    I stare a little harder there,
    I see me sittin in a chair
    abunch a girls gathered round damn I guess they love me there
    but then again they starin at my neck, not my dick, not my eyes
    and by the time I realize that about to die or something
    and then all to my veins they jumpin
    bitin and mutha fuckin suckin
    I see I'm turnin pale and shit
    I think I wanna bail and shit
    too late now a cant even move, cant even speak
    cant even breath
    so what am i to do, to not shit wanna why
    because I'm fuckin bout to die
    wait, no its all a dream
    or maybe thats just how it seems




    Submitted on 2005-07-22 14:03:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this one was ok. it was pretty weird. i don't think u did too good of a job on this one. it was pretty simple. like u didn't put much thought into it
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      nice...i saw ppl didnt comment on this one so i thought...ill take alook...and the ppl who didnt write are just stupid. they can go...[censored] them selfs.. this was a kool dream. and its kool how u put it into a rhyme...idk if i could do that. ur talented. i like this one... another favorite! good job!

    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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