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    dots Submission Name: A Voice of Reasondots

    Author: SorrowfulMind
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Alton, IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 27/39/13
    Words: 434
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 1535
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       Everytime there is an Italic or Bold, someone is talking. You should be able to figure out on your own who the people talking are.

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    dotsA Voice of Reasondots

    A phone call. A voice.
    "It is time to make your choice...
    Do you think it's time to hide
    And let the vicious man subside?
    Or should you let him get inside
    You're broken heart?"

    A hand. A phone.
    "Can you make it on your own?
    Should you curl up crying there?
    Or should you, helpless, grin and bare
    As all his words will rip and tear
    Your broken heart?"

    A grip. A pull.
    "What was going through your skull?!"
    "Should you end the screaming pain
    Before it drives you near insane?
    Or should you silently sustain
    Your broken heart?"

    A squeeze. A tear.
    "How can you just settle here
    As he sits and tells you lies,
    And as he constantly denies.
    You just smile to disguise
    Your broken heart."

    A slap. A crack.
    "You should have known not to talk back!"
    "Should you sit within his arm
    While he continues doing harm?
    Or should you silently alarm
    Your broken heart?"

    A push. A slam.
    "You have no clue just who I am!"
    "Should you lay upon the floor
    Ang beg for him to give you more?
    Or should you stand as you restore
    Your broken heart?"

    A skid. A smash.
    "Woman killed in fatal crash."
    "Was this the outcome of your prayer
    Instead of sitting, crying there,
    Instead of trying to repair
    Your broken heart?"

    A letter. A voice.
    "This was my only, easy choice.
    To accept that I was wrong
    Would mean that I am not as strong
    As what I was. Should I prolong
    My broken heart?"

    "A knife. My wrist.
    I was trying to resist.
    But as I drove along that street
    I knew that soon, I'd have to meet
    That gripping violence. He'd beat
    My broken heart.."

    "My blood. That crash.
    Don't worry, Mom. It went by fast.
    I never felt an inch of pain.
    It was bliss calling out my name.
    Now I no longer must sustain
    My broken heart."

    A tear. A song.
    "Our daughter's gone, but life moves on."
    "They had a friend that they all knew
    Make a memory anew.
    They made a story just for you,
    Your broken heart."

    "Their words. His cry.
    Our little girl has said goodbye.
    She was a joyous smiling face.
    She was our pride, not our disgrace.
    No one will ever soon replace
    Her broken heart..."

    Submitted on 2005-07-22 16:19:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i have no words to describe how i felt as i read this poem. sadness, hope, despair, i can't tell you how i love but just that i do. the way you mixed in the dialogue as the main part of the poem, and the ending of every satanza being your broken heart..., was just amazing. well done my friend.

    M. X.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by mistakes | [ Reply to This ]
      Really fantastic poem! The flow was flawless and I love the dialouge and love the letter and love the ending stanza. And the repeating of ... broken heart was really good too. This was the best poem I've read for a while with original layout and powerful emotions portrayed. This is a favourite
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      thats really sad and that is a cool original format that you took. just the point of losing a child is bad and i hope that nobody has to experince that. i loved your emotions that were expressed very nice
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]

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