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    dots Submission Name: A tribute/proposal to a frienddots
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    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       with just a few days talking to lethargic me i have found someone that i really would like to get to know nothing more than to scratch the surface i wouldnt even dare to call it love


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    dotsA tribute/proposal to a frienddots
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    Did I ever think I would meet somebody
    that would share the same hobby as me??
    sure thats what makes the world go around
    but can that person share the same hobby
    and pick you up when, if ever, you go down

    Does that person have the ability?
    to write a few words
    and make me feel like a god in greek mythology
    of course she doesnt know it,
    that defeats the purpose
    of taking the time and effort to scratch the surface

    A proposal of something diffrent,
    nobody has ever seen
    a guy ask a girl to become a friend
    without going hysterical or making a scene

    with the same emotions and ways to express
    it will become a tearful goodbye at best
    with our pens wrapped together
    I don't believe that cade and des
    will live better




    Submitted on 2005-07-22 18:08:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      n she didn't even [censored]in read it yet! what a [censored]. that's kool. i may've met my dream girl here too, that'd be some [censored] if she was from WA tooo. wow. kool bean, grasshopper~nahlij
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      holy [censored], des evans, my des evans. i'm alice, you know the one from the poem. she's a great chick really and shes hot. holy [censored] i still cannot get over this. i gotta go talk to her.

    Alice
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by ambiquous_al | [ Reply to This ]
      well this is a good poem, and i agree with the others that you shouldn't use this to ask a girl to be friends, there are a few spelling errors but they are easy to fix, you have a great flow to this poem, it is strong from the begining to end, and i'd have to say that my favorite stanza would be

    "A proposal of something diffrent,
    nobody has ever seen
    a guy ask a girl to become a friend
    without going hysterical or making a scene"

    and i like this one because you talk about not making a scence and it reminded me of my friends and i because we are loud and annoying out and about.

    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      Well it is a good poem and it's deep. I'd have to agree with crypto and candi don't use this to let the girl know you want to be friends. As a female i would have to say i'd get alitle confused. other than that it's a good poem a little rough around the edges but it's fresh.
    Georgina
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by Raye | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorry to disagree, but in my experience, most girls are flattered to have poetry written specially for them. (unless it;s about them picking their nose or something...lol)

    I really liked it, it'a always nice to find someone you can conect with, and relate to. That's where good friends come from.

    Nicely written

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with crypto that you don't really want to use this poem to let her know that you want to "scratch the surface" and be friends.
    All in all this was a nice poem. Keep it up, i've been watching ya! :)
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]


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