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    dots Submission Name: Eye of The Zombiedots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 538
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 451



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    dotsEye of The Zombiedots
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    He kissed her full lips
    with unfelt passion
    called down the stars
    that never quite cared
    walked in the world
    a sleep deprived minstrel
    lay down in her arms
    made love in despair

    He found a fine job
    with a sizable income
    dreamed that each pretense
    was all for the best
    slowly unwound
    with a violent tremor
    a new 9/11
    in the land of the deaf




    Submitted on 2005-07-22 19:57:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      OK, I liked the poem, but what did the title have to do with it?

    I was expecting something dark, like ZOMBIES, the dead. Could you tell me how and why you titled this poem in such a way.


    illusions
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, my. This one I like very much. Especially the line "walked in the world a sleep deprived minstrel". Describes so poignantly & vividly what lotsa people are caught up in. I don't think you coulda made it any longer or better-powerfully tied up at the end.
    7elicia
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by CleoCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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